What a clever concept -comparing the masses that rush around blindly in their daily routines to mushrooms and sardines. I have never thought of it that way but it's true! Awesome job!
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Welcome, Melissa. This was part of a contest and Devons like the unusual, but the umbrellas just be.. read moreWelcome, Melissa. This was part of a contest and Devons like the unusual, but the umbrellas just begged for the mushroom analogy. Thanks for stopping by to read and review.
Beautiful language. It's elitist, dismissive of the stick figures from below. Going with Devon here, because his review was so spot on - it does read like an alien caption in a sophisticated textbook of history, in verse. To the umbrella wielders, that's exactly how the affluent might seem - extra terrestrial.
Very cool how these sci-fi vibes seem to leak out of this 'capture'.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
I think it the focus of this picture and the technicolor feel to the picture. It brings out the alie.. read moreI think it the focus of this picture and the technicolor feel to the picture. It brings out the alien invaders feel.
"Mushrooms and Sardines" is a very good description of the daily grind for many. Fun piece,
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
It was a fun write. I've enjoyed these picture challenges because they give me something new and in.. read moreIt was a fun write. I've enjoyed these picture challenges because they give me something new and interesting to write about.
interesting to read the many different views of the image,, one thing I noticed
is many felt the sense of rushing from this picture.. ha i like the poor b******s part
sounds like my little man character.. they just cant catch a break, the hoi polloi, packed
like sardines in the overcrowded situations of life..nice work....
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Yes this is the perpetual rat race, the hamster in a wheel, and someone looking on from on high, sar.. read moreYes this is the perpetual rat race, the hamster in a wheel, and someone looking on from on high, sardonically sending moving waves of pity their way...poor b******s..lol
Devons' contests are always interesting.
This has a strong feeling of damning perpetuity, illuminating through the dull mundane drabness the colour of nature and mechanism on a conveyor belt of existence.
The concluding repeated lines speak of repetition itself in a demonic sense, detached - as this scene of existence would be perceived objectively, as if by some separate species in a study of day to day human life. Observed dispassionately of course this is very much how it seems - and as an observer there is a disturbing sense of being of a different species to those who busy themselves like gestalt ants, unthinking, through an unthinking world.
A compact, concise and very telling depiction and evocation of the life of man we know all too well - and leaves us cold and shivering at the thought. But we are also left darkly impressed by the reality.
Posted 8 Years Ago
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8 Years Ago
I'm always interested in your interpretation of my work. They are always right in target with my aut.. read moreI'm always interested in your interpretation of my work. They are always right in target with my authors intent, but sometimes more unique.than the poem itself.
Mr. Penthouse/Corner Office, stands at the window with a single malt Dalmore 64 in hand, looking down to contemplate the scene. He is of course removed, and only the weather made him take notice today of those little cos in his machine. He feels a bit superior, and yet he admitted the tenacity even as he pities their lot in life. But don't worry in 10 minutes they will all be gone from his mind faster than they could load the bus.
8 Years Ago
Yeah, and Mr Penthouse certainly is a different species...
Jan, This piece is wrapped around a packed subway ride, but it branches out to represent many other ways of commuting, by car in gridlock, packed busses, you name it. And 'Mushrooms and Sardines?" What a perfect turn of a phrase to describe the madness. So VERY well done! take care...dan
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Houston gridlock was in my mind as well as this picture. It makes this country girl feel a bit clau.. read moreHouston gridlock was in my mind as well as this picture. It makes this country girl feel a bit claustrophobic.
There's a world apart sense to this: empathy for the 'Mushrooms and Sardines - such a cleverness of phrase, and eight lines of acute observation coupled with the relief at being no part of it.
Posted 8 Years Ago
8 Years Ago
Definite relief to not be part! Thanks for the review Em.
The thought of standing there, ready to push and shove, appals the country girl I am! Will climb an.. read moreThe thought of standing there, ready to push and shove, appals the country girl I am! Will climb an old English oak right to the top and look out and onwards to ... space. Coming?
8 Years Ago
I'll cling oak trees with you all day long! We can tough the stars from the tree tops. But unless I.. read moreI'll cling oak trees with you all day long! We can tough the stars from the tree tops. But unless I can elbow everyone out of my way, I'll pass on the tram.
8 Years Ago
Laughing.. you're on! Or, rather - you're not. We agree!
Really must zzzzz now. Swe.. read moreLaughing.. you're on! Or, rather - you're not. We agree!
Really must zzzzz now. Sweet dreams whenever. So hope your eyelids open to a beautiful vista, preferably dreams come true. :)
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