Summer Love

Summer or not.. i love you.

Days become longer, nights grow shorter.

I can feel the tender summer air

Sitting here beside you, I can feel your warmth

The ocean breeze envelops us

Your hands in mine, we’re intertwined

The sea ripples, joining the tides of my happiness

And we watched as it floods the shore

I stared at the birds soaring toward the horizon

Then I looked straight at you

Not afraid to get lost in the depths of your eyes

I kissed you, a seal of my pure affection

I thought time stopped… yet…

The sun already sets, the cerulean sky turns crimson

Now, summer is almost over.

Don’t worry. The season will end,

But my affection will never fade

This summer is not the last time we’ll be together

I promise you, I’ll love you until my one last breath

Reviews

[Reflectus]

This is just beautiful. I could actually imagine a little scenario in my head. Summer loves are definitely amazing, this poem is just so romantic, I love that romantic scene that you have created, and well, it's just beautiful. It just seems to have flown freely, and has this very relaxing mood, and now I just can't wait for summer. And the reddish yellow skies at sunset. I just have one suggestion though. I see you're talking about everything in present tense aren't you? Then it is always better to ensure you keep that up throughout the poem, (lines 8 and 11 in particular), I just felt instead of 'stared' you could say 'stare' and 'kiss' instead of 'kissed', because then the whole poem would be in on tense. Nevertheless, this is a very sweet, summer-y poem, I enjoyed.

[Anna]

This is very pretty, it made me think of my boyfriend the entire time :) I miss summer haha, but very well written!

[Dessa Thens]

Really Nice. :) . loving for all eternity :)

[TawnyBlueStar]

This is really beautiful! Love the imagery :D I felt a connection between the beach, and all the wonderful things about it reflecting summer, describing love at its most powerful :D
love it

[Jed Waffle]

good 1 for a beginner

[Coyote Poetry]

"Don’t worry. The season will end,
But my affection will never fade"
A beautiful poem of love. The hot days of Summer do make us open to love and hope. No weakness in this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[imagination101]

smiling, this was stunning in imagery as well as longing! Awesome job!

[Mauricio Montoya]

Love is defiantly in the air on this one, great job, well done.

[Caitlin Dale]

wow. that's really romantic.
the way you captured those moments is just amazing. i loved how you pictured the summer: from the tender summer air to the the cerulean sky turning crimson. :)
and the passion added interest to me while reading this. i imagined clearly the image you wanted to convey.
such a noteworthy write coming from an excellent writer. GOOD JOB on this!! :)
♥♥♥

[Desmund Tiny]

sus..... ayeeee gusto nya kasi magswimming din eh....buwahahahahahahahahahha..... great poem...