It Isn't Real (It's New)

I watch a ton of horror movies so I had an idea so I hope you enjoy

The smell of death lays heavy in the air
still hearing their screams ringing in my ears
I now know the devil does exist
Seeing it has taken form
here
now
in this place
I press my back against the wall
just desperate to feel something real
It�s so dark
so cold
But I know I am not alone
hearing it moving in the darkness

I knew we should have not come here
damn that dare
We are just kids
now there all dead now
Fighting back my tears
Feeling as a thousand eyes stare
Shh
I hear something breathing
rasping gasps of air
If I stand still maybe it won�t see me

Holding my breathe
Not even seeing a shadow move
Hearing the door close
Then silence
It must have left
Sliding inch by inch across the wall
Finding a boarded up window
seeing little flecks of moon beams
slip through the cracks
I can�t make to much noise it�ll hear me

Pulling with all my strength
Knowing I�ve gotta get out of here
I�m the only one left alive
They just won�t budge
An uneasy feeling sweeps over me
Smelling the scent of decay
Swarm and fill my lungs
I feel it�s breathe upon my neck

Closing my eyes as tight as I can
�This isn�t really�
�This isn�t really�
�This isn�t really�
Slowly starting to turn
�It was just a dare�
�IT WAS JUST A DARE�

Author's Note

I watch a ton of horror movies so I had an idea so I hope you enjoy

Reviews

[An Ordinary Woman]

I did enjoy it, it gave me the same feelings as if I'd watched what you watched. If I watched movies, I bet I could guess just WHAT you watched that inspired this- it gave me chills when you said "pressing my back up to the wall, yikes. LOL I just woke up so I think it felt really real in my half and half state. I hope it don't give me nightmares. lol This was a great read, Robert, I enjoyed it a lot. Oh and I love that image.

I'll send you a pic of this house we have up the road, you'll freak out. LOL This was great!

[Brette Medb]

OOOOO I loved this! I love horror movies and this was perfect. The picture at the end suited it nicely too. The flow was good and the imagery creepy. Great write,

Brette

[E. M. Murren]

I think I used to live in that house. LOL That was really fun to read. Horror movies never change, do they? LOL This was a wonderful entertaining poem. Really fun. Thanks.

[Morgan A Lynch]

i really liked this.. it keeped me reading. awsome job.

[Collie]

hmmmm

[Collie]

This is just creepy. Interesting but creppy

[Emily B]

ooh spooky! I don't watch horror movies, I'm a big chicken. But I've been in places that would make your skin crawl. Your descriptions are awesome.

[Gary H]

Great, dark and mysterious as we all try to work out what 'it' maybe and take the form of. The first two stanzas made me think of the distraught writers on the site as their work disappeared. Seriously though I really like the child like feel you have given to the ambience. I can see the children coming up to the old house, peeking in before daring to go further, once inside overcome with the fear of what lies in the darkness around them.
I'm thinking you could use this as a introduction to a story or piece that takes you further into what happens, maybe a different viewpoint from another child's mind of that of the devil or a haunting demon. The idea of a poem to start with would work well.
Seriously eerie!

[Jenny Davis]

Woot! This is phenomenal, Robert...
you really drug me into the scene and I was quite disturbed,
in a good way of course, hee hee ;)
You have a knack for this genre....really great stuff!