The good ones are always taken

Why are the good ones always taken?
Or is it I who is mistaken?
The beautiful ones have been born
But it seems I'll never have one

Why are the good ones always taken?
Or is it I who is mistaken?
They never glance at me twice
Is how I look so un-nice?

Why are the good ones always taken?
Or is it I who is mistaken?
No matter how hard I try
Away they seem to always fly

Why are the good ones always taken?
Or is it I who is mistaken?
They say love is in every end
Guess I've been moving in circles instead.

Reviews

[barleygirl]

What single person (especially later in life) hasn't felt this way? Your sentiments are well-expressed & resonating with my entire life. I had my chance at "the good ones" back in my younger days, but I was so flippant, kicking them to the curb becuz I had my pick. Nowadays, I see that this is the case (as in your poem) . . . I guess I didn't have the persistence & patience to walk with one of these seemingly boring "good ones" thru the years it can take before they actually become as good as they seem later on. But it's kinda fun to express our longing, even tho we settle on a reluctant acceptance, as in your ending.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for your lovely review. We tend to lose diamonds while searching for stones

[CrimsonRoses]

'Away they seem to always fly '
Perhaps you should try "Away they seem to fly"

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks, suggestion noted

[.]

A fine write, Jerry.

A universal theme.......missing out on the beautiful girls that one desires. You are not alone in that regard! It happens to all of us. We just have to keep searching.

Interesting use of repetition and rhyme. Perhaps take a look at that last line. The idea is good, just try and find a word to rhyme with it and complete the poem consistently. Perhaps using the word "bend"?

Either way, well written, as always.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for your heart warming review. I appreciate the observation on the last line.

[TheLostMind]

I loved the flow here, quite elegant. I also loved the way your poem ends. The good ones aren't always taken.. :)

[Jerryyoung1z]

Lol thanks for stopping by, I appreciate it.

[Bina]

You have such a beautiful heart as I see in your words. This shines through with much energy.

Lovely poem!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thank you really really for your kind words, I was feeling a little sad when I wrote this.

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

The last stanza was an amazing conclusion. Great poem. Something many can relate t. Tyfs!

[Jerryyoung1z]

Thanks for the review

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

You're most welcome!

[His]

Because they aren't good enough for you Jerrs. You deserve the best of the best.

[Jerryyoung1z]

Haha thanks Rys, and so do you

[His]

XD you'll have better luck than me you're a lot more attractive