The End...

So this is a bit unusual, but please read it top to bottom and then bottom to top as all will be revealed :)

The end;

She dies

only one choice left

there is no longer a way to live

no one to hold her 

no one to cherish her dreams

living or dead

no one

the darkness caving in 

clouds of lost thoughts and drowning decisions 

tell her she is nothing

she deserves what she gets

voices bark nonsense 

cruel as the world is 

no hope

no faith

no love

tearing her apart

destroying everything in her path

trouble seems to follow

falling down the rabbit hole

physical and mental

never ending scars 

judge

don't judge

always falling behind 

following the darkness

past and present

madness yields to her 

it's now a race to sanity 

it was a gateway

she made her choice 

so many drugs

never knowing how low it would take her 

the pain too real 

she savoured the highs 

deciding to turn her back on everything 

she lost so much

by gaining the powder 

the never ending eclipse in her heart 

the girl felt so alone

so young was she 

back and forward 

like cat and mouse

starting this dangerous game 

hiding behind closed doors 

she was brilliant 

but no one told her so 

she never knew how smart she was 

In spite  

she expressed herself in art 

always moving home to home 

but was never able to leave the memories behind

she was a foster kid

compassionate 

but insecure 

beautiful 

faceless

there lived a girl 

once upon a time... 

Reviews

[J.Michele]

So I have tweaked it a bit, hopefully it makes more sense now :) x

[hannah y.]

hmm, i've always liked these, they're very difficult to pull off but they can really be quite meaningful. however, in this case, i think the bottom to top made much more sense to top to bottom, since there were lines like "back and forward / of cat and mouse" which wouldn't really make sense.

i enjoyed reading it and the imagery you use to show this girl falling apart is powerful. with some edits in some places to make sure that it would make sense read both ways, i'm sure this would be an amazing poem - a great start! :)

[J.Michele]

I absolutely agree and thank you for being honest. I don't usually write poetry so I hope it wasn't too cringe worthy :)

[hannah y.]

haha, it's absolutely not cringe worthy! i could never pull off one of these and i think you have an excellent start! ^^ i'm reading more of your writing right now, haha

[J.Michele]

Aww well thank you :D