Lifeless to the Core

There is a cloud of negativity,

Sweeping through my soul.

Crippled by the silence,

No longer feeling whole.

The person I once was

Is who I want to be.

But enslaved to the masses

I may never be set free.

My cruel attempts for affection

Hurt those I love the most.

I feel so numb inside

I feel just like a ghost.

Lifeless to the core,

Alone in my despair.

I hold on to the past,

As if I just don't care.

But truly you must believe me

When I say as I sit and cry,

These long nights in the cold

Make me want to simply try. 

I want to be better, 

Oh god, I want to see. 

Someone help me understand, 

How to be who I need to be.

I'll surrender all my pride, 

I'll give up on my schemes.

No more grasping my wrists,

No more wishing I would bleed.

I'm putting it all behind me,

For a life I'll hold dear.

Maybe if you'll love me,

It'll help me persevere. 

Reviews

[Laurierose]

The intense pain was so strong it was almost palpable in this piece. I like how the speaker touched on idolizing the person they once were. I often think of how easy it would be to return to those days of pre exposure. However, I like think that that exposure to such pain in the early days help makes us stronger. This way, when we're faced against such adversity, we're mentally prepared and ready to tackle anything standing in the way of a great day. I like this piece; it's very raw. Great read.

[That1Nerd23]

"Raw" that is my favorite type of compliment in regards to my writing. I feel so confident after reading your review. I really appreciate the support and your shared thoughts. Thanks again! :)

[emipoemi]

"love is all [we] need" - lol! the last line of this poem rings so true. A little love is all it takes to make us carry on. This is a well constructed and executed poem. You have a couple of musicality issues towards the end, but the energy, the imagery, the message! Brilliant! Very well done indeed!

[Pete]

I feel your pain in this. So honest & in touch with yourself. I think we can all relate. Nice job.

[Steven Cash]

I like this. Good job. Always enjoyed your writing style.