Dried Roses

Poem about my dead flowers

Beautiful once beloved

Fragrances of fantasy

 

Blossoming young bud

Rubies of reality

Briars draw blood

Benevolence and brutality

Dead and dried

Visions gone of vanity

Candor comes so callously

Memories stay so maliciously

Flowers of fallacy

Dried roses

Collecting dust

Just like us

Author's Note

Please critique

Reviews

[SmittyJas]

Some put them in their bible dried rose petals symbols of love long passed but not forgotten.

[SuspectGray]

Never thought of my self as a flower of fantasy...but I will now. Memories of what was now only echoed in a dry bouquet.

[Jessalynn]

I'm glad you liked it. I was afraid a lot of people wouldn't understand the progression to the last line but seems like a lot of people read and grasped it. thank you so much for the review.

[Alias]

this is really powerful stuff, great imagery and use of the connotations of roses, and the last line is a great punch. Excellent stuff

[Jessalynn]

thank you so much i'm really glad you liked it

[Southern_Writes]

An old love, once beautiful and vibrant, turned painful and then naught but scars and memories. I enjoyed this piece!! Beautiful.

[B]

I see time passing through your emotions
changing everything
yet keeping the essence of love intact

beautiful

[Jessalynn]

I'm glad you liked it thank you so much:)

[Dez H.]

I think this is a beautiful poem. I like the way you put your words together so wonderfully and how they fit to create such a form that your feelings seem to pour onto a page. I l like

[Ethereal flower]

I love this, I love the flow it has and how it reads! So beautiful and delicate but sad too.:) x

[Philip Muls]

You find all the right words to make it sound powerful and romantic.

Well done.

[annalysiar]

The first two lines from the rest of it is kind of spaced. But the poem is beautifully written, I felt like you were seeing actual beauty, spiritual beauty and superficial beauty all in one. Nicely formatted, evenly spaced. Nicely done.

[Jessalynn]

thank you so much :)

[annalysiar]

You're welcome, thank you for sharing

[McBear]

I see how some of the lines are grouped together correct? Well, maybe make a way to seperate the idead so readers wont get confused like "Where is she changing to the next idea?" I loved it though. Very nice vocab choice and it flows well!

[Jessalynn]

Thanks I don't know what you mean by grouped together. The lines are all separated by one space.

[McBear]

What I am saying is how you have like the poem explaining about one object/thing then it goes on to explain another. I got kinda confused reading it cause I feel like you should space out where you start to talk about a new thing.

[Jessalynn]

LOL. Oh no the poem is about how my roses were once beautiful and I loved them and what they represented so I dried them and kept them. But eventually they grew to represent something else entirely a reminder of something I began to resent them.

[McBear]

Oh, sorry lol. My bad..