So Comfortable

So Comfortable

A Poem by Kibbles and Quips
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I wrote the first draft of this poem one night when I couldn't fall asleep. Since then I have rewritten and edited it more times than I care to count. This is the latest version.

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The night has come,
I'm here to lie
to skip tonight,
to wake today.

I’m under covers
with my pillows,
with these comforts
I’ll wake tomorrow.

In fact,
I am

so comfortable that
enshrouding blankets of black abate,
solitude's quiet seduction assumes,
rather soon I will be sleeping.

Just now,
I am.

But, ugh, this pillow,
it is somewhat small.
My covers are hot.
It's time to shift.


Yes,

that's

much

better.

In fact,
I am

so comfortable
my eyes are tired,
my body's limp,
I couldn't move
if I desired.

Just now,
I am

so comfortable
my eyes are closing,
my body's refreshing,

here I lie;
I am dreaming.

In fact,
I am -

but what was that?

I a m su re

i wa s
t nOth ing.

n
I t d d 't soun d like
i

owls asking or the wavering winds whispering,
it wasn't the sea and shore shivering.

A voice!

But what did he say?
A name?
A place?
It sounded familiar.
But what did she say?

No, no, no,
that's not important.

Just now,
I know

the night has come,
I need to lie,
I must skip tonight,
I must wake today.

In fact,
I can’t.

My pillow's thick,
my covers smother -
sticky, slippery, hot sweat.

I need a different posture.
I suppose that'll do.
I lie to skip for what comes after.

Just now,
I try.

Perhaps if
I count sheep.

One...
Two...
Three...

Three!

I forgot to bring her three!
not two
but three!
She mentioned three!
She only wished for three.

No!
that's irrelevant,

merely
only
just
a memory.

Tonight,
I won't.

The day has come
I've tried to lie;
awake last night,
I'll skip today.

She's under covers
with his pillows,
without her comfort
there's no tomorrow.

© 2016 Kibbles and Quips



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Kibbles and Quips
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I was just listening to some jazz songs I never heard before (Chet Baker), and decided to read this while listening. This was real comfortable to read and I liked the idea of not being able to sleep with her in the back of his mind.

Interesting read.

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

12 Months Ago

Hm, that's an interesting way to read this poem. I will have to give it a try! Anywho, I am so happy.. read more



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I loof forward to reading more of your work. This was very relaxing and enjoyable to read. I like the disorder of fragmentation of some of the words and letter, you can visualize the process of finding just the right portion, spot, temperature zone to welcome sleep.

Posted 9 Months Ago


Kibbles and Quips

9 Months Ago

Thanks, friend! Glad you enjoyed it.
I was just listening to some jazz songs I never heard before (Chet Baker), and decided to read this while listening. This was real comfortable to read and I liked the idea of not being able to sleep with her in the back of his mind.

Interesting read.

Posted 12 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Kibbles and Quips

12 Months Ago

Hm, that's an interesting way to read this poem. I will have to give it a try! Anywho, I am so happy.. read more
I like this piece; I find it interesting the way you played with the placement of the letters too. you really are an amazing writer and yeah

Posted 1 Year Ago


Kibbles and Quips

1 Year Ago

This is one of my favorite poems I have written. So, thank you very much! The disjointed letters and.. read more
Shae-Leigh Johns

1 Year Ago

yeah of course. :)

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