Collecting the Girl

Collecting the Girl

A Poem by j













Umbrella-filled skies to catch blue rain 

and loose-leaf paper dragons
sail through the arcane

Speeding cars fly by in colours and

shapes that hurt her eyes

It’s too easy to laugh when all she wants

is to cry

 

With no voice save her own
she sings to the music that floods her mind

and forgets all her manners

forgets to be kind. For the world is too noisy

to remember her lines

 

She scribbles love notes to the sea

on grocery lists and paper moons, and mails them

to the south of France

        pockets sewn up

with regret for having left

far too soon

 

And on tumbled shores of darkwater tide

       and glass bottles under pressure of time

she is fluid and liquid and seaweed and brine

collecting her freedom, lost dreams

and promises

      to marry the sky

© 2014 j



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I was looking for something...I found it
"on tumbled shores of darkwater tide
and glass bottles under pressure of time
she is fluid and liquid and seaweed and brine
collecting her freedom, lost dreams
and promises
to marry the sky"
What I found, was a brilliant display of poetic tapestry saturated in rich emotive color.
Quite stunning to look at :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

1 Year Ago

oh dear lynn pls forgive my tardiness in acknowledging your truly wunnerful words. you are unfailin.. read more



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I was looking for something...I found it
"on tumbled shores of darkwater tide
and glass bottles under pressure of time
she is fluid and liquid and seaweed and brine
collecting her freedom, lost dreams
and promises
to marry the sky"
What I found, was a brilliant display of poetic tapestry saturated in rich emotive color.
Quite stunning to look at :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

1 Year Ago

oh dear lynn pls forgive my tardiness in acknowledging your truly wunnerful words. you are unfailin.. read more
Your work is always amazing and you always add new spices in your flavour, I love the subject and your style is always classic:)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

you are so lovely to keep coming back, a. leaving such encouragement as to compel me to search abou.. read more
A. Amos

3 Years Ago

You're most welcome my friend...
To finish with these words creates such a feeling of deja vu, of experiencing more than deserved yet never to be denied, ' .. collecting her freedom, lost dreams ~ and promises ~ to marry the sky'

I had to return, I have to - time and time again. Because.. because you write beautiful emotions, freely and yet without melodrama; your tears truly are golden jewels, dear you.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

oh ..... oh ...... at this late hour on the cusp of a new day [here], emotions run the gamut of self.. read more
such a wanderer you are Jill to so many places of beauty and heart break

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

dearest d ....... and you follow along through it all with heartfelt acuity, my friend. thank you /.. read more
A beautiful and hopeful field trip in your words. I like the many places you took me with in your words.
"She scribbles love notes to the sea
on grocery lists and paper moons, and mails them
to the south of France
pockets sewn up
with regret for having left
far too soon"
The above lines were my favorite. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry.
Coyote

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

thank you so much, coyote. very kind of you to stop by.
Very powerful ending. You have a very special way of transporting feelings like no other. Deep emotion expressed ever so beautifully through your unique images and skillful pen..stunning..

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

aww sue, you always make me feel so set apart and .... worthy. and for that i am without adequate g.. read more
Ladysue

3 Years Ago

J, you are very welcome..my pleasure to read your work.. :)
Jill, this is amazing and beautiful. So wonderful to read you again, you have become such a gifted writer.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

3 Years Ago

very nice, mark. it means a lot to receive a nod from a masterful poet such as yourself. many than.. read more
Excellent read! the words flow so graciously off the tongue of your pen, leaving a feeling or airy elegance. :)

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

j

5 Years Ago

thank you, sandy, for coming by and leaving such kindness. :)
This is so perfect that I'm not even sure what to say about it, other than it's going in my favourites.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I always know where to come to read a work of art. Your words never disappoint me. A true gem.

Posted 5 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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