A Breif Dis-counter

A Breif Dis-counter

A Story by swearwolf
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Very short heart breaking love story.

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I was in a well-known high street retailer one afternoon in Manchester trying to get some ideas for Christmas presents. I walked in and there was this absolutely stunning store assistant stood near the entrance. We immediately made eye contact and we held our gaze for what felt like an age; it was electric. She was tall with long red hair and piercing blue eyes, she was achingly beautiful. I browsed around the store as I intended while she helped a customer; we both kept stealing glances from one another. She had an aura about her, a disarming, friendly demeanour with a smile that could light up the dark. I kept my cool nonchalantly looking at items trying to mask a coy smile each time I caught her looking at me. Minutes later she made a beeline for me only to be interrupted by another customer. I could sense her frustration by the minor detour but returned to her charming self once again. Everything she did seemed to come from a place of genuine kindness, a true class act. Finally, she started walking over to me, her eyes locked onto mine. I thought 'I can't believe it, today is the day my luck changes.' She got closer; she was even more gorgeous then I first thought. My heart was racing; she was coming over to tell me what she wanted to tell me from the moment I walked in the store. She stood in front of me and in a cool tempered voice said;

"If you're not going to buy anything can you get out."


© 2017 swearwolf



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Good little story. I like the clever title, and that ending is quite humorous. I think a lot of people could have been on the receiving end of this misconception. When we see an attractive person, many of us misinterpret their attention as affection. There are a couple minor grammar issues, if you care for me to point them out. Regardless, good story!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

swearwolf

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the review. I would really appreciate any help or advice from anyone no matter how min.. read more
Clifford

2 Weeks Ago

That's a very good trait to have: willingness to accept help. The grammatical errors I noted are com.. read more
swearwolf

2 Weeks Ago

I should have paid attention in school haha! Thank you very much I appreciate it.



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Good little story. I like the clever title, and that ending is quite humorous. I think a lot of people could have been on the receiving end of this misconception. When we see an attractive person, many of us misinterpret their attention as affection. There are a couple minor grammar issues, if you care for me to point them out. Regardless, good story!

Posted 2 Weeks Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

swearwolf

2 Weeks Ago

Thank you for the review. I would really appreciate any help or advice from anyone no matter how min.. read more
Clifford

2 Weeks Ago

That's a very good trait to have: willingness to accept help. The grammatical errors I noted are com.. read more
swearwolf

2 Weeks Ago

I should have paid attention in school haha! Thank you very much I appreciate it.

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Added on November 1, 2017
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Tags: Love, Heartbreak

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Somewhere, Up North, United Kingdom



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