... inkling ...

In our thoughts behind our minds
     Thoughts you see start to untwine
       Hints of threads crumbs of bread
         Iron their ways to what is said
           Like a gift in presence of a baker
             Wrapped in cloth a picnic maker
               Minds eye warmth on hearts ears
                 Grassy hills near seas souvenirs
                   Whispers uplifting as pelicans fly
                     Expressions of love kites flight join skies
                         Feast love letters high in minds meaning
                           Sense on clouds a just meant in dreaming
                             Tone of smile seams sewn on pillowed head
                               Drifting off lately within your said bed
                                 Inner… thoughts… behind… our… minds…

Reviews

[Benita-Staebell M - Kin..]

I loved this is a Awesome piece.


Thank you for sharing this
wonderfully penned write.


I loved these stanza's lines.


Whispers uplifting as pelicans fly
Expressions of love kites flight join skies
Feast love letters high in minds meaning
Sense on clouds a just meant in dreaming
Tone of smile seams sewn on pillowed head
Drifting off lately within your said bed
Inner… thoughts… behind… our… minds…



blessings. kindred poet

[jacob erin-cilberto]

sooner or later that kite does get up into the air...and sooner or later those inklings of thoughts become like kites...flying in plain sight, flying on a paper sky.

[Lyn Anderson]

A wonderful use of style that definitely adds to the piece. I am known around these parts as the errant apostrophe hunter, so I would be remiss in not pointing out that crumb's should be crumbs, and Mind's eye should have its own apostrophe. Nice to meet you. :)

[trooper48]

This is like a dream. Clouds, pillows, beds, fly, skies, it's all there to imagine. It flows well and the thought is 'in tune.' Well done.

[MAC]

love the rhyme scheme, a well written poem.

[Pax]

i like how the poem flows... it led me to imagine how our thought just flows in every stroke of our pen... very nice!

[Pryde Foltz]

Drifting off lately within your said bed
Inner… thoughts… behind… our… minds…

Sublime memory to feeling to thought to what lies beneath. Excellent.

[Ranger Kessel]

visually and mechanically this is awesome. i am glad i stopped by thanks for posting and sharing

[Matching Socks]

LOVE the visual presentation of your poem.
Stunning imagery. Nice work.