Silent Melody

Dealing with a loss

Our hero stands, looks up above,

No word will slip his lip.

He does that every night

Long after everyone's asleep.

 

Not making wishes upon stars,

His true wish can't come true.

If you'd see him standing there

You'd be left without a clue.

 

A melody is on his mind,

Not matters of the world.

Not from words it is composed,

Yet from things that can't be told.

 

Made up from thoughts and feelings,

Things others can not see,

A broken heart that turned into

A silent melody.

 

He's yelling out in silence,

And no one hears, none replays.

He had created in his mind

A world of half truths and lies.

 

For the truth he can not handle,

It's too hard for him to bear.

He seem to know it isn't true,

Yet he doesn't seem to care.

 

He's yelling out his heart for her,

The one who's on his mind,

But no answer will be given,

For she had long lost died.

 

Yet he stands there every night,

Beneath her window, near their tree.

For he will always love her,

In his silent melody.

Author's Note

Wrote this one a long time ago.

Reviews

[ELii]

This is a beautiful poem. The flow of the poem was like a melody. I think you have given me an idea for a drawing. thanks!

[Sarah]

This is very haunting and beautiful. The ending was certainly a heart-breaking twist, and a very rewarding read! I loved the line "He had created in his mind / A world of half truths and lies." Great use of language! ^_^

[Forest Green]

Very heartfelt and authentic. The reaching out in desparation from a permanent, living absence. Good writing...from beginning to end.

Excellent!

Daniel

[Nicholas Hallows]

You capture the internal anguish and pain perfectly in this poem. Violent and consuming on the inside but to the outside world invisible. It makes me wonder about the people you see or pass everyday and what is going on inside their hearts.

[DarkAngelWriter]

This has me thinking...hard. It makes me think about my boyfriend... Christ... *wipes my eyes with the back of my hand*

[Beautifully Tragic xPoe..]

I feel like Ive read this before, maybe its in one of my contests or something.... this is really good. Nicely penned with a great flow.


Great Write.
Rayne

[mattavelli]

That's beautiful.
The people we love cannot be replaced. :(