Captivated

Captivated

A Poem by MsJewel
"

a little love scribble

"

Art ~ Henry Asencio

 

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Mesmerized, captured
in rapture, it's true
lost in the beauty
of all that is you

hypnotized, breathless
from where I am love
you have captured
my every thought of...

romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

and I’ve fallen too
with every heartbeat
from where I am now
this feeling so sweet

has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

~~~


© 2014 MsJewel



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This rhyming is so rhythmically perfect and so well paced with the theme -in other words, the timing of when new concepts come in is very regular and fitted to the rhythm of the words. This is very effective! You seem to be a master of when to rhyme and when not to...and I am jealous. It is hard to always know when a structure is needed and when it isn't, at least for me! Great ending as well. Overall this is just such a thematically complete poem, that is is a real pleasure! Thanks!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

You are so sweet Robby. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. You made my day! :) Jul.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It's really true!! This is a beautiful use of the structure of rhyming and of using that structure .. read more



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This writing is absolutely amazing!

Loved it !



Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment Sasha :) Julie
has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

Your ending is heart of your poetry, loved it.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie
A. Amos

3 Years Ago

You're most welcome
This rhyming is so rhythmically perfect and so well paced with the theme -in other words, the timing of when new concepts come in is very regular and fitted to the rhythm of the words. This is very effective! You seem to be a master of when to rhyme and when not to...and I am jealous. It is hard to always know when a structure is needed and when it isn't, at least for me! Great ending as well. Overall this is just such a thematically complete poem, that is is a real pleasure! Thanks!!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

You are so sweet Robby. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. You made my day! :) Jul.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

3 Years Ago

It's really true!! This is a beautiful use of the structure of rhyming and of using that structure .. read more
This is amazing. I ended up reading it more than once. Definitely one of my favorites.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you Brittany. I'm thrilled you enjoyed it! :) Julie
I loved every part of this. The word play was superb. Thanks for sharing!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your very kind comment :) Julie
Shaquana Adams

3 Years Ago

You're welcome :)
A very romantic weave...you do do what you do well.
Enjoyed the heart pouring much.

Scott

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your very kind words Scott. :) Julie
Scott Metro

3 Years Ago

Always my pleasure Julie..
S.
A captivating love scribble from your pen Julie, you always capture the essence of pure romance. :-)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment Frieda. I appreciate you! :) Julie
romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

lovely imagery :)
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Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you! :) Julie
Bravo, Julie! All I can say is more, more, more. So love your poetry.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

You are very sweet. Thank you for your wonderful comment :) Julie

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MsJewel
MsJewel

The Beach, CA



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I've been writing poetry for 15 years. My poetry isn't unique in any way, but it is written from the heart. I have trouble keeping up with everyone's poetry, so please send me rr's. I enjoy rec.. more..

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