Captivated

Captivated

A Poem by MsJewel
"

a little love scribble

"

Art ~ Henry Asencio

 

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Mesmerized, captured
in rapture, it's true
lost in the beauty
of all that is you

hypnotized, breathless
from where I am love
you have captured
my every thought of...

romance and passion
and pale midnight skies
where starlight just dims
in the light of your eyes

and soft visions dance
in rose petal dreams
falling from the sky
on silver moonbeams

and I’ve fallen too
with every heartbeat
from where I am now
this feeling so sweet

has me mesmerized
fascinated with you
and dreaming that I’ve
captivated you too

~~~

© 2014 MsJewel


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This rhyming is so rhythmically perfect and so well paced with the theme -in other words, the timing of when new concepts come in is very regular and fitted to the rhythm of the words. This is very effective! You seem to be a master of when to rhyme and when not to...and I am jealous. It is hard to always know when a structure is needed and when it isn't, at least for me! Great ending as well. Overall this is just such a thematically complete poem, that is is a real pleasure! Thanks!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

You are so sweet Robby. Thank you for your wonderful comment and compliment. You made my day! :) Jul.. read more
Robert Tusitala O'Neill

10 Years Ago

It's really true!! This is a beautiful use of the structure of rhyming and of using that structure .. read more



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You recently told me I was a story teller in my poetry. I totally agree. You on the other hand i see as a painter in your poetry. A master painter which I truly envy ( in a good way ) ! I wonder what would be the outcome of us combining talents to produce one piece in which I tell a story painted throughout with your palette! I would actually be excited! If it doesn't work (as if we don't like the end product) its OK! I've never collaborated with anyone before! What do you think?

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

I think it would be fun to give it a try. I'm busy with work until after Christmas and then I shoul.. read more
Al R. Arce

10 Years Ago

I agree! Our styles are so far apart it might just work! At least it will be fun. I'm also super .. read more
MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Merry Christmas
i was almost out of breath by the end, very captivating. and know i can add a new word in my word supply that i have not thought of in a long time 'moonbeam'. thank you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie
Wow that was amazing left me breathless. Very beautiful!

Posted 10 Years Ago


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MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Thank you! :) Julie
Kristina

10 Years Ago

Your welcome!
Still flowing at an endless supply...your beautiful and affectionate poetry touches me and makes my heart sing. So very enchanting my sweet friend.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Thank you Jack. Welcome back and Happy Holidays my friend. :) Julie
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MAC
oh wow....the thought of loving something unknown....I love this, every part of this.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

...and I have become addicted to yours as well. :)
MAC

10 Years Ago

that would explain the munchies I have been suffering from :)
MsJewel

10 Years Ago

LOL - it could just be the cold weather...
Gorgeous penning. I think you have the whole café captivated by your talents.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

You are very kind. Thank you for your lovely comment. :) Julie
Who won't be mesmerized after reading such beautiful writes. Fascination is a relevant word for your readers...:).....................

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

I'm humbled by your wonderful comments Sami. :) Julie
Sami Khalil

10 Years Ago

My pleasure...:)................
The beat is great. The power his draw on you is evident. The question of did you do the same to him is sweet. Thank you.

Posted 10 Years Ago


MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Thank you Tom :) Julie
Mesmerized, captured
in rapture, it's true
lost in the beauty
of all that is.......
Your poem. This is the most beautiful poem i have ever read.......Truly amazing ans awesome!!

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

Thank you for your wonderful comment. I appreciate it very much. I look forward to reading your poet.. read more
Pushkar Prabhat

10 Years Ago

Most welcome and i would really love that!
Sensational, this is poetry in motion, it moved me. Well written poem! Fantastic Ms Jewel

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

10 Years Ago

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it. Thank you for the wonderful comment :) Julie

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MsJewel
MsJewel

The Beach, CA



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