Breathtaking, really...

Breathtaking, really...

A Poem by MsJewel
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~ # 2 in a series of poems by Trace and myself featuring the art of Fabian Perez in a man's and woman's perspective of the scene ~

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art ~ Fabian Perez

 

 

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He placed it next to her wine glass

a perfect rose

long stem, red velvet petals

lovely

breathtaking, really…

 

As were his eyes

and his smile

and the cute tremble in his voice when he asked

“may I have this dance?”

 

Her heart fluttered as he wrapped an arm around her waist

his eyes capturing hers

holding her

tight

toe to toe

hip to hip

 

Her breath quickened and her knees felt weak

as the music filled the room

She could feel the blush covering her neck,

warming her cheeks

 (it must be the wine…)

 

She closed her eyes, her head on his shoulder

her hand finding the curve of his strong back

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…

soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

 

They moved as one

the dance floor their own

on a night just for two

to a song she will always remember

with a man…..her eyes flew open

…whose name she didn’t know

 

She closed her eyes again

her face nestled against his neck

content

in the curve of his arm

perfect

like a long stemmed red rose

or a Sunday morning

breathtaking, really….

 

And so...

they danced

~~~


© 2014 MsJewel



Author's Note

MsJewel
The woman's point of view from Trace's poem, Hearts Desire http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1319422/

You can find Part 1 of this series:
Cat and Mouse http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Julie-Ward/1320141/
and Desires of the Heart http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1342992/

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Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…
soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

The lines above suggest so much more than one night of passion. Sunday mornings are reserved for serious relationships. It is an excellent way to show us rather than tell us. Lovely!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Brianna. This is part of a series I wrote with my writing partner Trace.. Check out h.. read more



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Mindless fun to have read such beauty and grace for fancy dancing and warm embracing pose. electric and moving like no other poetry does to me before or since.

Posted 2 Years Ago


The narrative carried me into the scene. I felt almost present. Some great lines in this piece. The sensuality buzzed!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words Alfred :) Julie
beautiful. Hmm such strong yet delicate samba like descriptive
flows from him to her the intertwining beauty that is courting and more
indeed well described.

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Posted 3 Years Ago


Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…
soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

The lines above suggest so much more than one night of passion. Sunday mornings are reserved for serious relationships. It is an excellent way to show us rather than tell us. Lovely!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thanks so much Brianna. This is part of a series I wrote with my writing partner Trace.. Check out h.. read more
very lovely yes i never want to stop dancing with the same partner life's a dance :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


I want to cry. Such detail like a photograph in the mind. A riot for the senses. It could have been me in years long gone by. Beautiful.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your very kind comment. I'm thrilled you could relate to this one my friend :) Julie
guess it was a bit more than the wine eh?

very romantic Sunday morning poem...done with your usual graceful style.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you Jacob :) Julie
This is excellent. It’s romantic, colorful, and full of action. If you could convert this poem to a song in the first person present time action mode ( think of that old song “Ballerina” with modern music ), it would bounce off the recording charts as a hit . I made a copy of this poem for further reference. You’re on to something great here.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your very kind comment. I hope you have the time to read the first three poems in this.. read more
Aethereal

3 Years Ago

I sure will. Thanks for the links!

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