Breathtaking, really...

~ # 2 in a series of poems by Trace and myself featuring the art of Fabian Perez in a man's and woman's perspective of the scene ~

art ~ Fabian Perez

 

 

~~~

He placed it next to her wine glass

a perfect rose

long stem, red velvet petals

lovely

breathtaking, really…

 

As were his eyes

and his smile

and the cute tremble in his voice when he asked

“may I have this dance?”

 

Her heart fluttered as he wrapped an arm around her waist

his eyes capturing hers

holding her

tight

toe to toe

hip to hip

 

Her breath quickened and her knees felt weak

as the music filled the room

She could feel the blush covering her neck,

warming her cheeks

 (it must be the wine…)

 

She closed her eyes, her head on his shoulder

her hand finding the curve of his strong back

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…

soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

 

They moved as one

the dance floor their own

on a night just for two

to a song she will always remember

with a man…..her eyes flew open

…whose name she didn’t know

 

She closed her eyes again

her face nestled against his neck

content

in the curve of his arm

perfect

like a long stemmed red rose

or a Sunday morning

breathtaking, really….

 

And so...

they danced

~~~

Author's Note

The woman's point of view from Trace's poem, Hearts Desire http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1319422/

You can find Part 1 of this series:
Cat and Mouse http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Julie-Ward/1320141/
and Desires of the Heart http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/TraceyB/1342992/

Reviews

[Brianna Brie]

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…
soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

The lines above suggest so much more than one night of passion. Sunday mornings are reserved for serious relationships. It is an excellent way to show us rather than tell us. Lovely!

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Brianna. This is part of a series I wrote with my writing partner Trace.. Check out his work if you have the opportunity. :) Julie

[s y e]

Your title is so accurate, Julie. It is exactly what this poem is. Breathtaking. What a way to heat up a Sunday morning for people... Oh la la!

[MsJewel]

Thank you sweetie! Hugs, Julie

[melissa]

This is a beautiful poem keep up the great work and keep sending me more to read i love reading them

[MsJewel]

Thank you Melissa! :) Julie

[melissa]

Your welcome

[Sami Khalil]

You make us tremble in a good way reading marvelous romance poem like these. You nestle love within the contents. Excellent...:)................

[MsJewel]

You are very kind Sami. Thank you and have a beautiful day :) Julie

[Frieda P]

This is 'breathtaking, really'...indeed it is. I love the tempo of your heated tango....ooh la la la, just enough sweet heat Julie, you made my Sunday morning. :)

Hmmm…he smelled like Sunday morning…
soft kisses tangled in linen sheets

[MsJewel]

Thank you Frieda... I love Sunday mornings...
:) Julie

[Frieda P]

Especially if he smells that way ha...my pleasure Julie ;)

[B-poet]

Loved the romantic touch you've graced this poem with. It's a keeper for sure. Great work Julie, a favored writing partner of mine, a mesmerizing piece. :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend. I hope you have time to read the first three in this series, I've listed links to Trace's poems. Hugs, Julie

[adreamer]

Happy Easter Julie, I'm really going to miss my peeps the yellow ones. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Happy Easter Larry! Hugs, Julie

[Raymond Federle]

Reminds me of the tango...cha-cha-cha...well done Jules! :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you Raymond :) Julie

[kublakhan27]

He smelled like Sunday morning...I loved that image, and I how you used repetition to get the feel of the moment across...in a way it mirrors dancing itself, as repetition is really the essence of dancing...if you're dancing with the right partner, you never want that repetition to end. I'll have to check out the complimentary piece soon...for now, I just focus on your piece and marvel at your ability to tell the story of that proverbial first dance...I think that many people will relate to this...lovely work as always Julie :)

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your very kind comment. I appreciate you and your friendship :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

My pleasure...Any time...:)...............

[icelandicblue]

How skillful you created this mirror image. It's it is beautifully composed and gracefully presented. This was a pleasure to read.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie