A Footprint in the Rain

A Footprint in the Rain

A Poem by MsJewel
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~ a heartprint ~

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            photograph compliments of pinterest

 

          

Words are weak and so in silence held

I lie still to hear his tender breath

rise above the whisper of the rain…

 

His kiss was as light as dawn’s first dew

that on calm mornings glistened ‘pon the buds

of flowers soft in bloom as lilies grew

tall against the wind,

                                                                in strength,

                                                                  ‘til rain

would find us but could never wash away

the guilt that hid in clouds above our bed

or the lust that still haunts my soul at night

even through the flood of useless tears

 

How I wish to rock him in an endless dream

to feel his lips gently kiss away

the fall of rain and yet he hangs his head

 

His footprint etched upon my grieving heart

                    

 


© 2014 MsJewel



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such raw emotions and such tenderness. I'm always awed by poets like you, Julie, who manage tto convey an array of feelings with breathtaking expressions. to me, the last line is a killer.
the guilt here tells me the lady is in turmoil because of something she did (?)

lovely poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and insightful review Woody. Have a lovely day :) Julie



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So much emotion, tenderness and depth, in this poem.

Posted 2 Years Ago


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MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words :) Julie
Blackstar

2 Years Ago

Your very welcome.
such raw emotions and such tenderness. I'm always awed by poets like you, Julie, who manage tto convey an array of feelings with breathtaking expressions. to me, the last line is a killer.
the guilt here tells me the lady is in turmoil because of something she did (?)

lovely poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind and insightful review Woody. Have a lovely day :) Julie
"His footprint etched upon my grieving heart"
This line gave me goosebumps.
Another beautiful master piece

Thank you
-Angad

Posted 3 Years Ago


What a statement of how someone could be missed so much and away from your life leaving foot prints on your mind. A love never to be forgotten may be a crack in ones heart to be so deeply in love with some special person throughout life. Keeps me wanting a lust of life as love makes an impressions on my mind in my past love was a cruel joke it was blind I would welcome love if TRUE.

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1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

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B.J
That was such an emotional piece, you ebb your feelings so deeply in your words. Your writing is a special gift to us all.

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Wow! You have made my day with your lovely comment :) Julie
B.J

3 Years Ago

you're most welcome
After reading this several times I'm still unclear about the cause of the speaker's obvious grief. I would hazard a guess that infidelity comes in to it somewhere, though. I will say that there are some excellent lines here. The first stanza can hold its own with any Very good stuff. The second stanza is obscure and disappointing after the promise of the first. The third stanza is tepid but for the line "the guilt that hid in clouds above our bed". More very good stuff there. Stanza four is solid work as a conclusion. Better than the ultimate line which may have been better worked into the body of the poem.

Posted 3 Years Ago


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MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. I appreciate your thoughts. This poem holds a s.. read more
Your words are bitter sweet and tender.Another beauty dear Jules :)

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment :) Julie
Vidya Bacchus

3 Years Ago

You are welcome :)
You have a tenderness with words that a new born could feel. Bravo!

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

You are very kind. Thank you :) Julie
Julie, I have tears fighting to the surface reading this poetry... It is amazing how another soul could so accurately pen the emotions I have within my own life experience. It tells me, I am not alone and I am not so different form the others in this place...
Your poetry also transports me to a place in my own life experience filled with the rainy day mix of love and loss, of beginnings and endings, of forever changing the core of my being.
Lovely, beautiful, sad, joyful, refreshing, and reflective emotions all at one time from this very fine piece of poetry!


Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

I'm so glad my poem touched your heart David. Thank you for your kind comment and compliment. :) Jul.. read more
What a lucky man to inspire such depth from you...we are lucky too to read your awesome, humanness.
Very touching..!!!

Scott

Posted 3 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

3 Years Ago

You are very sweet Scott. Thank you :) Julie

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