A Footprint in the Rain

~ a heartprint ~

            photograph compliments of pinterest

 

          

Words are weak and so in silence held

I lie still to hear his tender breath

rise above the whisper of the rain…

 

His kiss was as light as dawn’s first dew

that on calm mornings glistened ‘pon the buds

of flowers soft in bloom as lilies grew

tall against the wind,

                                                                in strength,

                                                                  ‘til rain

would find us but could never wash away

the guilt that hid in clouds above our bed

or the lust that still haunts my soul at night

even through the flood of useless tears

 

How I wish to rock him in an endless dream

to feel his lips gently kiss away

the fall of rain and yet he hangs his head

 

His footprint etched upon my grieving heart

                    

 

Reviews

[Woody]

such raw emotions and such tenderness. I'm always awed by poets like you, Julie, who manage tto convey an array of feelings with breathtaking expressions. to me, the last line is a killer.
the guilt here tells me the lady is in turmoil because of something she did (?)

lovely poem.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind and insightful review Woody. Have a lovely day :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i read a different aspect...the affair that produces a gentle rain of needed passion but at the same time causes guilt to shower itself on her, as she imagines being with him....conflicting thoughts.

wonderful poem...as usual...your poems are filled with stark visuals.

[MsJewel]

Conflicting thoughts..yes...and still wondering why it can't be easy..It should be easy...
Thank you Jacob for your lovely comment and compliment. :) Julie

[Lyn Anderson]

A wonderful, sad portrait of lost love. The longing in this is palpable. A very moving and emotive piece.

[MsJewel]

Thank you :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

You gently kiss away this love and it breaks the hearts. Your grieving heart knows endless dreams. Lovely as usual...:)..........

[MsJewel]

Thank you my sweet friend :) Julie

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome sweetly...:).................

[Einstein Noodle]

like a Greek tragedy of lust and guilt .. i feel the heaviness of this .. so good job says i! .. i stumbled a bit with "pon the buds" until i saw the apostrophe .. duh! :}

"... and yet he hangs his head" ... is just a killer for me .. like a millstone hung and he can't lift his head .. its a hammer blow to my chest!
this is the suffering that makes people write .. isn't it?! :)
love and peace
E.

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you felt this poem my friend. Thank you for your kind words :) Julie