Unhinged

Unhinged

A Poem by MsJewel
"

~ don't throw spears ~

"

            Cold Like the Stars ~ Carrie Graber

 

 

Hurtful words aimed carefully...

           swords

                                                          piercing

                                                                        my

                                                                               heart

                                                            Once thrown

they can never be taken back…

                                                               not really

 

Retaliation rolls off my tongue

with the precision of a sharp shooter

Finding the spot

                                                                         that quickly leaves

                                                                                                          complete silence

 

except for the slam of the door on his way out

 

Perhaps I should remove the hinges…

 


© 2014 MsJewel



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dan
Julie, The style of writing in this piece is a perfect match for the content, which is simply excellent. I know now that I need to read you more often; there are so many words, passages that hit home while I read...left me wishing the write was longer. And your closing line ties the whole piece up in a glossy bow: "Perhaps I should remove the hinges..." Perfect ending, ta da! I'm becoming a fan of yours, I hope you don't mind 8^) take care...dan (My real name; I use a pen name on the other site I post stuff, I regret that I didn't use my name when I registered. riki is actually the name of our ferret.) Thanks for sharing this with us. dan

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MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words Dan. The feeling is mutual. I'm becoming a fan of yours as well. I'm .. read more
dan

2 Years Ago

Julie, I'm not suggesting that you stray from your romantic writes, just that stretching out in the .. read more



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You capture that argument so well in this flowing spat of a poem Julie. The final line is a killer!

Posted 2 Years Ago


You find the most interesting art pieces to match or inspire your poems.
I like y9ou like keep it going!

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you Michael. I love art almost as much as I love poetry. I'm thriled you enjoyed my poem. :).. read more
unhinged means???

very superb are photos madam ???
why photos???
brainsick, crazy, demented, mad, unbalanced, sick, disturbed
Synonyms
balmy, barmy [chiefly British], bats, batty, bedlam, bonkers, brainsick, bughouse [slang], certifiable, crackbrained, cracked, crackers, crackpot, cranky [dialect], crazed, crazy, cuckoo, daffy, daft, demented, deranged, fruity [slang], gaga, haywire, kooky (also kookie), loco [slang], loony (also looney), loony tunes (or looney tunes), lunatic, mad, maniacal (also maniac), mental, meshuga (or meshugge also meshugah or meshuggah), moonstruck, non compos mentis, nuts, nutty, psycho, psychotic, scatty [chiefly British], screwy, unbalanced, insane, unsound, wacko (also whacko), wacky (also whacky), wud [chiefly Scottish]
Antonyms
balanced, compos mentis, sane, sound, uncrazy
retaliation
rɪˌtalɪˈeɪʃn/Submit
noun
the action of returning a military attack; counter-attack.
"the bombings are believed to be in retaliation for the trial of 15 suspects"
synonyms: revenge, vengeance, reprisal, retribution, requital, recrimination, an eye for an eye (and a tooth for a tooth), getting even, redress, repayment, payback; More

*** i understand madam
today it seems i want to read
your poems
something is there
which i feel
i should read...
perhaps a little known things
may be...
may be not
but....
i am reading...

one here is a fact...
i like your simple writing

in hindi " called {sagar me gagar}
to explain the very big thing in small and simple
say " brief and precise".

good madam...

p.v.p.d. sri harsha...

Posted 2 Years Ago


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dan
Julie, The style of writing in this piece is a perfect match for the content, which is simply excellent. I know now that I need to read you more often; there are so many words, passages that hit home while I read...left me wishing the write was longer. And your closing line ties the whole piece up in a glossy bow: "Perhaps I should remove the hinges..." Perfect ending, ta da! I'm becoming a fan of yours, I hope you don't mind 8^) take care...dan (My real name; I use a pen name on the other site I post stuff, I regret that I didn't use my name when I registered. riki is actually the name of our ferret.) Thanks for sharing this with us. dan

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind words Dan. The feeling is mutual. I'm becoming a fan of yours as well. I'm .. read more
dan

2 Years Ago

Julie, I'm not suggesting that you stray from your romantic writes, just that stretching out in the .. read more
Once thrown
they can never be taken back…

So realistic poem. Love it.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you :) Julie
agh....simply wow.....i never fail to be amazed...smoldering and smashing. wow again Julie.

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your lovely comment and compliment Ana :) Julie
Words can and do hurt...and once said can never be taken back. Revenge, though, is not as satisfying as one might think. I like the empowerment of this one....but then I think all your poetry is exceptional. Lydi**

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Sorry it's taken so long to thank you Lydi. I appreciate your wonderful compliment so very much. Hu.. read more
Retaliation rolls off my tongue

with the precision of a sharp shooter

Finding the spot

that quickly leaves

complete silence
Julie....this is such a wonderful poem, No words are useless in this powerful piece. Really speaks to the reader and flows very well. Great job


Posted 2 Years Ago


A very real and honest look at life as it is. A very enjoyable, thoughtful read.
(Perhaps swinging doors like in the bars of the old west . . . where gunfights might often break out. )

Posted 2 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

MsJewel

2 Years Ago

Swinging doors may work! :) Julie
Some strong huff & puff in this one. Did I hear the door slam?

Posted 2 Years Ago



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