Blue Dawn

Blue Dawn

A Poem by MsJewel

~ a romantic poem written in lai form ~



     richard johnson art




Quiet is the night

weaving pale moonlight

the hue

soft and oh so slight

sets my dreams in flight

of you

hold me ‘til dawn’s light

takes you from my sight

in blue



When the falling dew

sweeps the day anew

I’ll don

a dress of bright hue

a smile though not true

and on

a vision of you

I’ll find my way through

Blue Dawn


© 2015 MsJewel

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Author's Note

The Lai is a French form of poetry - each nine line verse consists of five syllable couplets seperated by a two syllable line with a rhyme pattern of a/a/b/a/a/b/a/a/b.

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See.. there you go again.
Being the consummate poet.
If this wasn't so dam good
I would say you were showing off....

But it is just too dam good.
You are amazing.
And this poem shows it in every line.
Crystal Blue perfection.

Huggs. Trace

Posted 2 Years Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


2 Years Ago

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Trace. Your comments always make my day... :) Julie


You write so airy, light and dreamily - like floating but with passion. Very elegant - like a soft caress or a soothing song. A true Romanticist! Simply beautiful writing.

Posted 1 Year Ago

1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


1 Year Ago

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Pete. Thanks so much :) Julie
dear Julie, lovely to learn of Lai,
the French form of poetry.
I adore the softness of your
poetry... the soft blue dawn of
awakening. truly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago

Its beautiful...its an amazing immediately catches the attention of the writer...Wonderfully written :)

Posted 2 Years Ago

have you written any books

Posted 2 Years Ago

Very sweet and very nice art work to blend with the words penned


Posted 2 Years Ago

Wonderful you can follow the French I sometimes have my problems this my natural Language English. Your Quit the Poetress.

Posted 2 Years Ago

I kinda like how creative/productive stuffs you often come up with. Sounds astounding! Liked the "Lai--thing" & enjoyed it to the fullest. I haven't read anything in such a format before, but now glad to read.. its rhythmic flow/fluent has a potential to worth whole pattern you're bled with words & it's kinda fascinating to read/write stuffs in new form/anew patterns'. I'm sure, you'd have enjoyed writing this marvelous piece for sure. Brilliant. Excellent job! ;)

Posted 2 Years Ago

I don't usually review poetry because I know so little about it. I enjoyed this poem and am very appreciative that you explained its structure. You taught me something today so thank you for that and for a lovely example of the form.

Posted 2 Years Ago

dear Julie... your French form of Lai is
tender and melancholy in a metered
symphony of sensual overtones🎶 ...
remembering the blue dawn of a
passionate love... truly, Pat

Posted 2 Years Ago

the form creates the pauses ... very well placed ... the rhyming is challenging ..skirting the land of trite and forced ... well done says i! .. and its French to boot ... romance again blooms in this old heart in reading your poetry ..
ps great smile by the way ;)

Posted 2 Years Ago

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Added on August 10, 2015
Last Updated on August 10, 2015
Tags: romance, love, dreams, lai, msjewel, poetry



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I've been writing poetry for 15 years. My poetry isn't unique in any way, but it is written from the heart. I have trouble keeping up with everyone's poetry, so please send me rr's. I enjoy rec.. more..

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