Blue Dawn

~ a romantic poem written in lai form ~

 

     richard johnson art

 

 

~~~

Quiet is the night

weaving pale moonlight

the hue

soft and oh so slight

sets my dreams in flight

of you

hold me ‘til dawn’s light

takes you from my sight

in blue

 

 

When the falling dew

sweeps the day anew

I’ll don

a dress of bright hue

a smile though not true

and on

a vision of you

I’ll find my way through

Blue Dawn

~~~

Author's Note

The Lai is a French form of poetry - each nine line verse consists of five syllable couplets seperated by a two syllable line with a rhyme pattern of a/a/b/a/a/b/a/a/b.

Reviews

[Trace]

See.. there you go again.
Being the consummate poet.
If this wasn't so dam good
I would say you were showing off....

But it is just too dam good.
You are amazing.
And this poem shows it in every line.
Crystal Blue perfection.

Huggs. Trace

[MsJewel]

I'm thrilled you enjoyed it Trace. Your comments always make my day... :) Julie

[andrew mitchell]

I love the format and your words just flowed ever so smoothly!

[MsJewel]

Thank you Andrew :) Julie

[SmittyJas]

Lovely and dramatic blue dawn I am very fond.

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Jim :) Julie

[jacob erin-cilberto]

nicely done with the form, because you kept the passionate feel....never lost it, the poem flowed as much as the love between the two, and the difficulty of saying goodbye in the morning.

j/.

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your lovely comment Jacob :) Julie

[onceloved]

:) This is so you Julie, you have a remarkable skill in selecting your words so carefully it's like every word matter to you, it is a beautiful bond between the artist and there muse pen. That why it is always a pleasure to comment on your beautiful poetry. :) Larry

[MsJewel]

Thank you for your kind words Larry :) Julie

[onceloved]

You are welcome Julie, I enjoy sharing another one with you. :) Larry

[Lydia Shutter]

You have always been brave about trying the forms, Julie. You certainly aced this one. Warm and soft, your gentle words rhyme so easily. Great imagery. So romantic. Lydi**

[MsJewel]

Thanks so much Lydi :) Julie