Judging eyes

Judging eyes

A Poem by Justin Street

Step after step
I hear pain in my cries
So long have I wept
Away from judging eyes

They prick and poke
Chip your heart with lies
Until now I never spoke
Watch my knuckles fly

Their blood is cold
From a heart that pumps ice
This argument is old
But my cuts are precise

To you your heart fed
I’m sorry that it’s not warm
I must leave you dead
I see your judging eyes scorn

© 2010 Justin Street


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A lot of imagery and emotion in a relatively short poem! The third stanza is my favorite! Speaking with your fists, great metaphor!
Barbara

Posted 12 Years Ago


Hefty words... I like the rhyme in this poem. - Very nicely done.

Posted 13 Years Ago


very good poem.

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is wonderfully written, I can feel the anguish, feel the sadness, I love the flow, the rhymes, the meter....well done, and congrats on placing in the contest.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Such a powerful poem. Wow you did an amazing job ^__^

Posted 13 Years Ago


This is an interesting piece. I like the way that even though you didn't say anything too directly, I understood all that was happening the whole way through. It was a good rhyme/flow, too. Good job.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Judging eyes can be cruel, i would say are always cruel .. we don't like that feeling of being judged.
This is a poem of metaphors it seems ..

To you your heart fed
I’m sorry that it’s not warm
I must leave you dead
I see your judging eyes scorn

Wonderfully written.

Chloe

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great job. I love it when I can feel the emotion in a poem

Posted 13 Years Ago


what a fantastic piece your so accurate with feelings here really well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


this is soo amazing and also easy to relate to great job this was fantastic

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Justin Street
Justin Street

Clarksville, TN



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Well I am Justin or Jt. I love photography, writing, and ping pong =). I can carry a conversation with pretty much anyone and everyone. =P The thing i love most is reviews =) so make me happy. I still.. more..

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