Doomsday Version-2

A dark epiphany..!

Wings flutter,

glass shatters

Sky Roars,

rain pours

 

Dark’s Lure,

keen & more

Sheer Yelp,

call for help

 

Hell’s arc,

surrounds dark

Peace gone,

the war is on

 

Shout and shout,

none hear you out

No place to go,

you reap what you sow

 

Light Shiver,

hope wither

Earth turns Red,

you drown in dread

 

No way out,

walk in shroud

Numerous strides,

no fast ride

 

Corpse’s heap,

fast asleep

No help came,

end of Game!

************************

 

“So go to sleep my girl,

Meet mamma after the fall.

In a place where it is safe to play,

to sing, to be, to pray..!” 

Author's Note

This a raw version of my Poem, Doomsday (http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/Jyoti_Swami/1590049/)
Constructive criticism is expected!
Hope you like it!

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

One of the great poets wrote the truth.
"Like a whisper.
like a whisper,
like a whisper.
Not with a bang, the world of man will die."
With chemical and bio. Can kill whole cities off with a sound. A powerful poem for thoughts. I pray with you. We need to lead with love, concern and kindness. If we don't. Whole world will know a dead-end. Thank you for sharing the outstanding poetry. Poetry support to make you think. This poem did.
Coyote

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

You are so right.. I am glad that my work provoked such insightful thoughts. Thank you.

[Coyote Poetry]

You did and you are welcome.

[PoeticChico]

"Peace gone"
INDEED
great piece!

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you! :)

[Kajal Sharma]

such a great poem loved it so much....keep writing jyoti

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Thank you Kajal! I am happy that you liked it! :)

[Stan Lee]

Doom. The poem is very scary. I liked the last verse which was a flicker of hope for better things to come. :)

[Jyoti_Ablaze]

Me too! It is indeed scary and pessimistic, so end is a solace.
Thank you so much for reading! :)