As fate shall have it

As fate shall have it

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze
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Just life

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There lived a bird, on the top of a tree

She chirped & tweeted in morning spree

Happy and gay, she settled in her nest

Awaiting the day, taking some rest.

 

She never suspected, the day would change

Nothing seemed obvious in far range

But suddenly the rustle stopped altogether,

The sham blue sky changed its colour.

 

Dark, storm clouds veiled the sun

Shadow covers the nest. There’s nowhere to run

Gripped in fear, the bird spread her wings,

To cover her nest and the eggs within

 

Three little eggs nestled there bare

Hatching was near, no time to spare.

The bird was now, anxious and scared.

But summoned courage & came prepared.

 

Wild wind blew, she shuddered with the tree

Rooted her claws and started to plea.

Her heart thundered when the sky broke,

Drenching the earth with giant strokes

 

The rain teared, no caressing drizzle fell

But a torrent, enough to fill a well

Now was the time to take the rein

Not to be panic stricken as bane.

 

The bird knew that the time had come,

To do something and save the eggs from

The merciless rain that poured and poured,

Formed a reservoir, impossible to ford

 

Fluttering her wings in frantic attempts,

She searched for something, anything in contempt

Found a bay leaf floating below

With tact she brought it from the water shallow.

 

She gathered her strength, with the leaf in her beak.

Placed it between her trembling nest and the wind

Like a shield she stood for the sword to strike

Determined to live and ready to die

 

She started to hope that she might win,

But a wild gush of air took the rein.

Knocked her hard and out of the nest

Fate’s whim inflicted woe and distress.

 

The wings rendered her life that eve

But the eggs fell down, nature heaved.

Three little birds never saw the sun,

Died in the shells, act was done!

 

 


© 2017 Jyoti_Ablaze



Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
"Life is unfair and it spares nobody"
I am aware about my incompetence with grammar, any suggestion to rectify the errors will be of great help.
Thank you for your time!

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No!!! you have me in tears right now. Poor thing, nature could be so cruel sometimes. Thanks for writing this wonderful piece. You know, as writers we sometimes hope to move someone with our words; you my dear friend have accomplished just that. So many emotions right now, especially anxiety and desperation. Great Job and thanks for sharing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your heartfelt review, Alex!
I am glad you felt the piece! :)



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Well composed. Keep writing :-)!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you!
Lovely story as well as the telling of the story, the rhyme scheme is nice and the meter just flows it is so smooth. I look forward to reading more of your work :~)

I disagree with Edis about the punctuation, if you read any of my poems this is what you will see posted in my authors note after each poem (I leave most punctuation to the reader that they can read the poem in their own meter, mood and motility).

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your encouraging review!
Nice poem! i don't want to sound like a grammar nazi, but try to make sure that you place periods in your poems at the end of your finished sentences before you publish it. but still it doesnt matter, great job!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Point noted.
Thank you very much for the advice and the kind review.
ah, and life is like that... but it doesn't prevent us from living and trying to overcome fears and obstacles... it doesn't stop us from protecting those we love, even if it means we, and they suffer... it is in the act of putting oneself before others that is the true test of humanity and we can do well to observe nature at work...well-done...

a couple of tense items you may want to change:

line 5 should read ...the day would change

ist line in stanza 7 should read ...that the time had come

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Yes, you are right. At the end, all that matters is humanity and virtue.
Thank you for sugge.. read more
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2 Years Ago

You are welcome! I really enjoyed this poem!!! :)
Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

I am glad you enjoyed it!
You told a real and sad story. Nature can be cold and heartless. I have heard mother bird cry out for lost babies. A lonely cry. I do believe the heart of the animals are under estimated. Thank you for sharing the excellent story in the poetry.
Coyote

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

You are right.
Thank you for your insights.
Coyote Poetry

2 Years Ago

You are welcome.
i like this poem a lot, but the repetition is sorta getting to me, but it doesn't even matter, i still loooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooove this piece!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much!
What a profoundly powerful view of living; surviving, fighting against all that rises against us. You compose these beautiful, bittersweet glimpses, this story of strength that flows in the storm, and shows such pain... such agony in the living. It's true.. painfully true that sometimes, no matter how hard we try, we will fall... we will lose... we will face obstacles that cannot be overcome. And through your poetry we find the truth and can prepare our hearts to awaken once the suffering has moved over us. Thank you, dear Jyoti.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Indeed. Thank you Craig for your insights and the kind review.
Always an encouragment to hear.. read more
An owl on the moon

2 Years Ago

And always a blessing to find new thoughts from you, Jyoti.
'Wild wind blew, she shuddered with the tree,, ,, Rooted her claw and started to plea. .. .. Her heart thundered when the sky broke,.. .. Drenching the earth with giant strokes'

As you say, life can be unfair and you've exampled just how by writing your lovely poem. Your story starts so sweetly then gradually builds into a wretched and quite common tragedy. I could picture the little mother bird trying desperately to protect her unborn babies with that single leaf. And of course, that's what mothers do.. the moral could so equally apply to any loving, protective parent.

You've created a fine opening, a more than plausible finish and, the tale between the two flows beautifully. Maybe a little more attention to tenses and grammar would help. But, truly, congratulations, tho' finishing sadly, this post is delightful.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Whatever was the reason of her tragedy, her sorrow was for real.
emmajoy

2 Years Ago

Laughing, Many would very much question that!
Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

No Emmajoy, just read a poem of yours, you have a way with words.

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