Creeping murk

Creeping murk

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze






So many screams muffled into silences

Silences that echoed through the walls

Walls that wept blood, night and day

The blood clotted and turned black

As black as her sooty eyes.










© 2015 Jyoti_Ablaze



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A cryptic surge of words to this compact piece makes it ambiguous. Delivered beautifully.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you for reading and comment.
Many suffer with lack or love and compassion. They hid so as not to show the damage. Well done.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

And sometimes they have to do so in fear.
Thank you for the kind review.
In a world bereft of love and hope, the enviroment can become a rather toxic place to be !

Nicley expressed in so few words !!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the nice comment.
Darkly poignant, hit the mark with so few words.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you for your kind review.
Thought provoking, elegant, and macabre all at once. Very nice!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you for the review! I appreciate! :)
Keep reading.
Very nice wording and meaning on this one!
Keep on writing!

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you Emily!
I This is a poem that I read and start thinking what the author meant, I classify this a good poem.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you Cassie.
The girl is struggling from something dark, of which she cannot speak.. But.. read more
Wow, this really gets the reader to think, very thought provoking. Well done and very vivid in the word selection.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you so much for your kind review.
poignant and precise ... this is happening as we speak in far too many places .. with those that rejoice in it ..the horror of such brutality is nauseating .. they rejoice and scream they are doing good ...actually doing "god's" will ... how corrupt is that kind of guiding light ... but their screams are drowned out by those silences that penetrate all our walls ... sometimes elevating us to awe and reverence as well as compassion and empathy for suffering ... well done! you poem is a rocket to the gut ... comes from the mean streets ... :{
E.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

read it again ..even better ..so very in the streets real ..
Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you E. I wish it wasn't.
Einstein Noodle

1 Year Ago

i hear you :(
The carnal nature of man.the useless spillage of blood.....it all seems so hopeless sometimes.
Uve pictured it all in this short poem.the dark element adds to its overall power.
An exemplary write.

Posted 2 Years Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

2 Years Ago

Thank you, Joel for your kind review.

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