Twinkling Star

Twinkling Star

A Poem by Jyoti_Ablaze







Twinkle, twinkle little star

marred with scars of love and war

you shine when the world is sleeping tight

like a ray of hope guiding through the night

 

Twinkle, twinkle little star

witnessing my euphoria and despair

you are like an oasis in the barren sky

bravely, holding your ground up so high

 

Twinkle, twinkle little star

marred with scars of love and war

you blink and wink while I gaze

bring the new moon, spellbound in daze

 

Twinkle, twinkle little star

I stoically wait, from afar

for you to soothingly touch my soul,

rejuvenate my body, make me whole





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© 2016 Jyoti_Ablaze



Author's Note

Jyoti_Ablaze
Star gazing..
Thank you for your time!

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it's a sign of true writer that whatever his/her eyes capture in a time, he/she slips it all down in deepen words. liked the rhythmic mix of this poetry. nicely modified. i liked this version much better than the ol' one i or, i guess, we all used to hear in nursery class. lol xoxo

nicely hummed!

Posted 11 Months Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

11 Months Ago

Thank you very much, Adam for your kind words. Glad you liked it!
Adams

11 Months Ago

i'm even very amazed to see the strength of your "views" and "reviews"...
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Jyoti_Ablaze

11 Months Ago

Oh thank you. My friends here at cafe are really generous and kind.
Such an innovative idea! Kudos to you!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you! Well, honestly, a boring college lecture can do this to your brain, make you write a nurs.. read more
I like how you play with the song and add the depth and mystical nature of the nighttime sky. Lovely.

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you very much thetish! It was indeed calming and fun to pen this down.
Couldn't help but sing the actual song after reading this
Very nice piece, raw and so pure.
Felt a sense of calmness, just like whenever I star gaze.
Well done
Aphy

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you Aphy! Glad to see you visit. :)

Gazing at the stars and dreaming is really amazing. A beautiful poem with good rhymes

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

My! Beautiful name!
Shabeeh Haider

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Jyoti. (:
Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Welcome. :)
Oh, how many times have I had these feelings when looking at the stars. Quite an accurate usage of words you have there. I liked the image you used, and the rhyming in the poem allows it to have a perfect flow almost. Of course no one can miss that the first line in every stanza was taken from the song, which I'm sure gave you an inspiration.
Good write I had a great read :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you Drori for your kind review.
Glad my work resonated with your thoughts.
Amazing poem, very creative! It held my interest from the beginning.
And you taught me a new word, that is Stoically. Tyfs!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much for your energetic review!
Glad you liked it!
Cyprian Van Dyke

1 Year Ago

You're most welcome!
Twinkle, twinkle, little star,
is that you in the window,
Jyoti, dreaming away so far?

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Herein, My Dear, Your voice rings clear and sweet as a crystal bell, with sadness and the beauty of eventual everlasting happiness and peace, where there is no pain … up "there" through the starry portals to God's wondrous eternity, or this is how I perceive the essence flowing from your enthralling poetic voice.

Oh, what dreams we can dream upon a star, and it seems they've spoken back down to you, gifting your ink with their glowing stardust.

Like sweetest wine, your poetry becomes more amazing with each passing of time!
I love it, Jyoti … warmest hugs to You, Lovely Poetess! ⁓ Richard

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you so much Richard! I am humbled by your review!
Glad you liked it.
Magical. Very nice write Jyoti. :)

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Thank you, Gaurav!
I was actually star gazing recently, reminded me of that time, very nostalgic. Good work as always Jyoti!

Posted 1 Year Ago


Jyoti_Ablaze

1 Year Ago

Oh thank you Eliot! So glad you could connect!

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