What a Shame

Author's Note

Yes, that is me in the photo. For those who can not read the photo here is the text:

What a shame.
I have no eyes, no sight to gain.
This darkness seems a bit unfair
to show me things that are not there.

For the one I long to see the most
A love now gone is but a ghost.

I have no eyes, no sight to gain
no beating heart...oh, what a shame.

Reviews

[Lyn Anderson]

It is a great piece. I especially like the last two lines, and I especially liked being able to read it ...:)

[Lyn Anderson]

Unfortunately, it is either the resolution on my screen or my old prescription, I cannot read this piece at all.

[Sectando]

I put the text in the author's note for you :)

[uNmAsKeD-dEluSiOns]

Great work! I agree very honest piece- It has pure raw emotion :) "I have no eyes" Great way to start

[Sectando]

Thank You! :)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

This is a very, very honest piece. Sometimes I feel like this...and it is a very dark place to be. You capture your emotions well, and your emotions are often mixed into one: anger, depression, loneliness, etc. I've been in that place too many times....

[Sectando]

Thank you for the detailed review. It is a dark place to be...I find myself there too often myself. Thanks!

[Ellizabella Dunnmore]

Great job with this poem! I loved the mood and word choice :)

[Sectando]

Thank You! :)

[Ellizabella Dunnmore]

No problem! :)

[Eliza Mae]

"What a Shame" ... How Riveting.

[Sectando]

Thank You, Eliza.