Thrown It Away

Thrown It Away

A Poem by Kaitlyn

I am hypnotized 
By your body
Lost in my own head
Everything about you
Is making me insane
But only in a good way
Your laugh keeps me in a trance
Your eyes show me the life we could have
If only I hadn't thrown it away

© 2010 Kaitlyn


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I agree, bittersweet, but I can relate to it quite well. I like poems that describe a paradox of emotions in just a few lines. Nice work.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Great work. short but pointed. Kind of scattered thoughts and feelings fighting to be real.

Posted 13 Years Ago


very nice... short, bitter sweet.

Posted 13 Years Ago


good job on this one

Posted 13 Years Ago


It felt like you were admiring him from a far, how did you throw it all away? why did you? very good write.

Posted 13 Years Ago


Welcome to no sugar coating,the group you joined wher we give constructive feedback.I realize that you are 16 and that your depth will change.Push the envelope a little(.I am hypnotized by your naked body)
It is risky to start a line with but.Try that line without the but.

all of this is just suggestion from no sugar coating

your eyes show me an alternate reality

Posted 13 Years Ago


nice job here, this was great stuff, methinks. this reflects the bitter reality of our lives, such that we don't realize what we have until it's all gone. nice job!

Posted 13 Years Ago


Lots and lots of if only's on this road we call life, but wiyh each one we learn a little, how to play the game, and maybe even win. I liked this poem of yours, well done

Posted 13 Years Ago


This was so uplifting and then you brought me crashing down to the ground. A really good write! Don't stop!

Posted 13 Years Ago


0 of 1 people found this review constructive.

in a good way seems to be alright!!!
but ending is sad...nice one...i like the way it began and ended...very different...

Posted 13 Years Ago



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Hi! My name is Kaitlyn, I'm 16 years old. I can be really interesting at times. (Haha). I love having fun and writing. Writing & Music are my life! I don't usually talk about things, I just write abo.. more..

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