Surreal

    

 

I sat inside your love today

And your spirits' rays caught mine

I think  I've met you somewhere before... deja vu

Maybe in a past life?

Because I think I've fallen for you

Many times before..

Serendipity?

I can't,

Describe...

I've never felt so safe

Knowing there's no escape

I linger in your translucent glow

It's like-

Your touch, it sends telepathic lightning bolts through me

Passion flows through my body and trickles down into my fingertips

And tears dwindle away

For once I can feel free

For once I feel alive 

Reborn

I can feel you inside of me

I want to savor this feeling for all eternity

Reviews

[Rick Puetter]

Dear Onyx Sky,

This is a wonderful write. You do a wonderful job of summarizing your feellings. Often your choice of words are just excellent. I particularly like the opening line: "I sat inside your love today". What a perfect choice to show how enveloped you became in the experience and how you breathed in the love. Very nice.

Very best regards,

Rick

[bluessadmood]

God you brought back the memories when i first reviewed your writing months
before .i remember how wonderful it was ..your words..this in my hand now is even greater
i swear you almost threw me off my chair what wonderful words
i sat in your love today..your spirits rays cuaght mine..how divine
i think i ve met you somewhere..in other beautiful time or land
maybe in heavens or some past life
i ve fallen all for you..time and time before
cant say ..cant describe it.never felt so safe before
you leave me no escape as i linger in your glow
your touch like sweet
lightning bolts that ran through me
as tears dwindled away..for once you brought me back to life
i can see ..i can feel and cry ..i live again..i live again
i just loved this have read such sweet thing for a while now..lovely work

[Arthur Crow]

I'm blown away by the image.... it's entrancing!

Your poem is so lush and beautiful, it just flows effortlessly with gorgeous hues of the soul.
Really enjoyed the mood of this well scribed gem.

[AG]

isn't it a wonder how much beauty and detail can come out of a single moment in time?

this poem executes my point exactly.

you colored several words that i'm very intrigued with.

i like how you've expounded a certain emotion and crafted it to a colorful and moving poem.

kudos to you, once again

[The Purple Kazoo]

i really liked the third line: "i think i've met you somewhere before...deja vu." it sounds so natural and not forced. also, the highlighting of certain words with the color pink definitely worked. these are key phrases, and they are getting the emphasis they need and deserve.

[BLACKCRUSH]

I'm really feeling this poem, very good work. I love some of your descriptions :" I sat inside your love today and your spirit's rays cought mine" Just to start out with that Wow , Amazing write , bravo, bravo!

[THE LOST ROSE]

This is a wonderful piece. I just came across your work and this is inspiring. U have a amazing gift and delivery of your thoughts. Thanks for the trip that leads to your heart. I am off to read some more. C-ya soon.

[Sydelle Houston]

Extremely well done! My imagination wandered with every descriptive word! Love and life can be surreal, especially if it feels like you've been down the same path before.

Great read/write!

[Kandii]

I love it, it reminds me of how I feel about my significant other. I'm new at this website and I try to give my best comments on others writings but I'm not one of big words. Continue writing...
Kandi

[Seriana]

Oh my word woman!!! This is incredible! I love it. It made me go "awwwweeeee" at the end. Nice job! And good luck in the contest. :)

[The DuchessPoet]

Sometimes I think you think that I don't have any merit to my response to your work...
but you are a gifted writer and this is another example of your gift!
(ragazza si � awesom!)