Fire

Fire

A Poem by AE
"

A house burned down next door.

"

I felt the fire whisper through the walls,

Creep through my window

On a stale breeze,

And lay with me in bed.

It woke me with a drop of sweat

And the cries of small children.



© 2017 AE



Author's Note

AE
A few apartment buildings had to be evacutated because the wind was blowing the smoke through the windows.

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I am quite intrigued by the word "felt" in the first line. Why not use a sense there like "heard"? I also thought the sense of smell would have been helpful to your image.

I loved the personification of the fire though. My favorite lines were, "Creep through my window,/And lay with me in bed."

-Jazz

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AE

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Jazz Lover. I was asleep and I didn't really register the sound, I just felt like somethi.. read more



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Fire is very scary. If a wild fire. Cannot be controlled. You create situation and concern. Thank you AE for sharing the excellent poem.
Coyote

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AE

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Coyote.
Coyote Poetry

10 Months Ago

You are welcome.
I am quite intrigued by the word "felt" in the first line. Why not use a sense there like "heard"? I also thought the sense of smell would have been helpful to your image.

I loved the personification of the fire though. My favorite lines were, "Creep through my window,/And lay with me in bed."

-Jazz

Posted 10 Months Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

AE

10 Months Ago

Thank you, Jazz Lover. I was asleep and I didn't really register the sound, I just felt like somethi.. read more

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