3 Poems about love/religion (Movie of our life, Fast Car And Jesus is my safety belt )

A lonely Christmas doesn't necessarily mean a sad one <3

*~~ Movie of our life ~~*

In the Movie of our life,

You are my heroine.

We are stars you know,

Can't wait till our story begins.

Like that Christmas I sat by the window

Looking down at the trees below

Feeling sad and so alone

Imagining a better time.

Sound of pebbles against the glass,

You called me down and we had a laugh

We took a stroll, there was a heavy breeze

Put my jacket around you so you wouldn't freeze.

In the movie of our life

You would make the perfect wife

Our wedding would be grand

Promise you, i'd always be your man.

If King Kong could Fall in love

And fight helicopters from above

I'd fight for you everyday

Take your side, come what may.

I know your love has changed me

Cause i'm a better man than I was before

You friendship has saved me, together

We have learned to love and grow

They will write a story on us one day

Maybe a movie to go with it

The greatest lovers alive, the billboard said

Hollywood's biggest hit

This is where my poem ends

Don't worry though our story just begins 

On the boulevard, your star will glow

For our movie put on an amazing show

~~~<3~~~~

Fast Car

I want to get to you as quick as possible

Times flying and it isn't flying my way

I'm racing down this highway called life 

and I see you at every exit telling me not to quit

Never give up Kee, you can win this race..

I'm yours if you come in first pla

ce

So I press on the throttle speed it up to max

as i'm zipping down this racetrack

Shifting the gears, fighting my fears

Commitment issues, scar tissues of the past. 

Life's a race, and If I want to win you, I gotta be fast.

I don't have the perfect car or driving skills to win

but with a prize to motivate i can't be late 

i'll seize victory and claim thee

My Fast Car seats 3

That's one for you and one for me

And one for my savior, the almighty.

Jesus my safety belt

Jesus can you please hear me out

I know I talk a lot of smack and weird you out.

But i'm honestly not hating on anything you said, 

I'm just you're creation left for dead.

In this

 clueless world I don't quiet understand.

Jesus help me, hold my hand.

I know your with me I feel you sometimes.

Specially when she talks I feel you working through her

I feel you in her heart never us fall apart.

Its like your taking care of me through her

I used to live in fear

But no more, none of that .. 

I feel more alive than I've ever felt before

Thank you for leading me to my baby's door. 

She took me in, she gave me love.

She sheltered me with kisses and kept my head above

The sinking sand this world is drowning in with sin

Jesus thank you for believing in,

me as I now believe in you.

Forever in my fast car there's a seat for you. 

Author's Note

To all those lonely lovers out there this Christmas eve.
Not some of my best pieces, but I put it out there anyways <3

Reviews

[Elizabeth Porterfield]

Actually, they are pretty good in my book:) I love how you connected them all in a way, the thread that binds them being the girl. Beautiful work Keegan:)

[Bluefire]

Not some of your best pieces?? Are you kidding? I love these poems!
They're very creative and I like the rhymes. Well done! ^^

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

fills me with longing tis the reason I hate the holidays .... especially Valentines day lol even wrote a poem about it if you want Ill send you the link just let me know.

And now tonight is new years sigh ... I never make new years resolution's but this year I think I will ... I vow to kiss someone for the first time by the stroke of midnight

Brilliant write thought invoking

[KeeD]

"# sad didn't get to spend new years with ya' or get that kiss :(

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

aww

[Frieda P]

These are all good, I especially like the first one.

'If King Kong could Fall in love
And fight helicopters from above
I'd fight for you everyday'

Huge grin :D So romantic, it tickles me silly.

Not sure why you bundled these together, I think I would have enjoyed them more individually. You're jumping from one emotion to the next, there's only so much Kee I can handle! ;-) As always an interesting and delightful read.

[KeeD]

Just read this review, wow lol i love that i'm able to tickle you silly :P "huger grin" I didn't think they were good enough to put them up as individual poems :D

[Bronwen Cox Hollinger]

Charming.

[KeeD]

:D Thanks

[~SouthernGirl~]

Wow. These are absolutely beautiful, almost brought me to tears. I really am not really a religeous (I don't think I spelled that write) person, but this was very well written. These were very good, and I'm glad you posted them. Best of luck to you. :)

[KeeD]

religious :D, and thank you so much, i'm glad you liked them I don't consider them to be my better pieces but xD I like the reaction they're making

[~SouthernGirl~]

Yeah. :) You are very welcome. They were very good. Good luck, and merry Christmas. :)

[KeeD]

Merry Christmas and hope you have a very successful and wonderful future full of happiness < 3

[~SouthernGirl~]

You too. :)

[}Echo{]

I love these. This is really cool. :)

[KeeD]

Thank you :P

[}Echo{]

:)

[ms. barrie]

"not your best pieces?" -- maybe it is me but this is fantastic
Movie Of our Life - section:


Sound of pebbles against the glass,
You called me down and we had a laugh
We took a stroll, there was a heavy breeze
Put my jacket around you so you wouldn't freeze.


In the movie of our life
You would make the perfect wife
Our wedding would be grand
Promise you, i'd always be your man

-- wonderful use of imagery, capturing romantic longings
amazing flow

second fast car:

and I see you at every exit telling me not to quit
Never give up Kee, you can win this race..
I'm yours if you come in first place
So I press on the throttle speed it up to max
as i'm zipping down this racetrack
Shifting the gears, fighting my fears
Commitment issues, scar tissues of the past.
Life's a race, and If I want to win you, I gotta be fast.

--- very poignant imagery, your words eloquently captured

third: Jesus: My Safety Belt:

i'm also not religious but these lines stood out to me


Jesus can you please hear me out
I know I talk a lot of smack and weird you out.
But i'm honestly not hating on anything you said,
I'm just you're creation left for dead.
In this clueless world I don't quiet understand.

-- evocative of one dealing with loneliness and the frustrations of life, almost crying out..

all in all very profound, and powerfully emotional, every line, has its own unique beauty while weaving rhyme and flow through-out this entire piece. incredible writing, Keegan :) 100 to 100

[KeeD]

Oh wow :D what a great review :D , I love how those lines stood out for you, some of those lines stand out for me as well too in my life. Yeah i'm not religious, I believe there's a God but the concept of religion and church it seems like a very controlled organization seeking out mindless followers for their own selfish purposes.

[ms. barrie]

you welcome, you're an incredible writer, Keeg, never forget that :) -- wish i could have half your talent! keep writing & thanks for sharing

[KeeD]

< 3 thank you so much! everyone on this site is amazing in their own unique style and way xox.

[ms. barrie]

you welcome so much and true :) x and o's

[Andie]

Oh goodness. Tears.
I don't consider myself a religious person, but this was just so beautiful. You did an amazing job capturing the emotions. As I said before, tears.
Man, I don't even know what else to say except these were some awesome poems.
< 3 xoxo

[KeeD]

Aww thank you. You're too kind. They were alright :) xoxo.

[KeeD]

offers you my handkerchief to white them tears. Lol this guy comes prepared with a handkerchief to a tearfest

[Andie]

Haha I except your handkerchief with much gratefulness (is that a word) lol

[KeeD]

blows my nose, here you go my lady :P

[Andie]

Oh how very kind of you, good sir! *Wipes your snot all over your new shirt.* ^-^

[KeeD]

Any excuse for me to take of my shirt. Luckily I've been to clown school and I always have a shirt under a shirt just for emergency's and pie crumbs.

[Andie]

Clown school? Were they the only ones that excepted you? LOL I'm so mean. Forgive me. XD

[KeeD]

Lol yeah I got in through the schools board of trusties. Your daddy heads that board LOL. lets go home together, and cry at the same time. We'll be clowns together and throw pies at the same time. Ooooh oohh ohhhhhhh I'm so bored :*(

[Andie]

Well, it's about time you replied! :p
Sound's like a plan! I call throwing the first pie! ;D

[KeeD]

i'm going to spray orange juice in your eye, How you like em apples :P

[Andie]

Well, since I'll already have the apples... I'll spray you with apple juice!

[KeeD]

OMG .. XD i'll lick my own eyeballs.. yumyum :P :when you said you already have the apples I thought you meant: "cough cough" changing topic. LOL

[Andie]

HAHA! Oh god...
You're horrible! XD

[KeeD]

lmao :P "blushes" why wrank wru very much

[Andie]

Okay. Now I have permission to call you Scooby Doo. So get used to it!

[KeeD]

xD Scooby roooby rdooooo! heheheheh scooby snacks :P
"smacks yo a*s" yikes! a a a a a a-monster!!!!!

[Andie]

Omg it's time to put the joint down my friend!! XD

[KeeD]

Lol, why come hotbox with me, lets breath each other. OMG I can smell your armpits. They smell like cotton candy and bunnies.. aww @_@

[Andie]

Lol I'm on my way dude!
You smell like pancakes and shampoo by the way!

[KeeD]

LOL that is so gross :P Pancakes and shampoo.. eww who even smells like that :P I atleast gave you bunnies.. Fine now i'm going to elaborate, the bunny got dumped into a sewer and then got rescued by a yeti who then ate it but barfed it out cause it was too fury and the bunny also was equipped with ninja stars that kept poking the yeti's throat.. so now the bunny smells like yeti insides, sewer water and yeah.. am i missing anything? OH yeah damn gurl you smell good :P

[Andie]

HA! Well, you smell like pancakes that Paris Hilton used to bathe her dog with. Then she used them to wipe after a major dump. You used the shampoo to try and make it smell better. XD LOL

[KeeD]

Umm I don't mind? Paris Hiltons poo smells like Strawberries and a freshly ironed sun dress on a oh so sunny day. Her dog and I bathe all the time, you sound jealous :/ and like the shampoo was precaution in case I got to close to the aura of stench your armpits emit :P Protocol urges me to be prepared and properly quarientied if i come in contact with you i'm labeled as contaminated :P

[KeeD]

My coffee must have had tigers blood in it, cause i'm "winning" :P

[Andie]

You're joking right? I bet Paris Hilton's crap smells like desperation, shame, and berries. Stale berries.
You would bathe with her dog. Can't keep away from the, b*****s yeah?
And for your information, my armpits smell like love and happiness!
:p

[KeeD]

xD Book me a spot, love and happiness seems like just what I need.
And I rofl at the desperation, shame and stale berries part lmao.. that was so original and spontaneous :P you're my better half lmao..

[Andie]

Ha! I'll see if I can pencil you in. Everybody wants a go at my pits! I'm nothing special, just crazy as hell! I probably have ADD or something along the lines of that. XD lol

[KeeD]

You have monkey testicles its a very common disease. Its under the radar at the moment because the government wants to contain it.. before news spreads that its a cotanagent

[KeeD]

^ don't think thats a word,what I meant was its contagious ?:P

[Andie]

Ohhh. I've head of MT. My dog's brother's mom has it. So sad....
Ha. don't ask me about grammar or spelling. I have dyslexia my friend. :p Ask your mommy.

[KeeD]

Can you adopt me? I want to meet your dogs brothers mom, she seems like quiet a cool biyatch. Monkey testicles is also a blessing because it provides you unlimited stamina for all the doggy style sex you can have. No one knows how to diagnose monkey's testicles like I do. I've got a phd in BS. and i ain't afraid to use it. So now i know you're add and dyslexic..next you're going to tell me you have a penis that looks like a flower. Gosh, its like i'm watching the national geographic channel :P

[Andie]

Sure! I've always wanted an Indian brother who smells like waffles that just crawled from Paris Hilton's a*s. Hop in my car. I have a phd in beat down, so I can take you out!
Can't say I have a penis.... do you? If not, I don't judge. XD

[KeeD]

OH do you want me to pop out the bazooka? cough " I mean the mini gun" HEY HEY HEY self confidence keegan.. YOU MEAN THE BFG? (bigfuckinggun)

[KeeD]

bang! this conversation just got so weird^ LOL.

[Andie]

LOL This conversation has been plenty weird before that! I bet Bieber has a bigger 'gun' than you. lmao

[KeeD]

Umm probably, he got so many girls jumping up and down that disco stick.. that his ride never shuts down for maintenance. But you'd like my gun, it shoots out colorful rainbows and gummybears. Who knows.. play your cards right it could be your gun someday :P

[Andie]

HAHA! You wish Peado Bear!
XD

[KeeD]

lmaoo :P Oh yeah forgot you're like 12 or something yeah :P.. Go to sleep little girl, quit poking the big boy.

[Andie]

12? LOL no. I'm 15. That's no better I guess... lol
Oh well. :)

[KeeD]

LOL /pat lil panda pat. its k i'm a cradle snatcher lmao.. >.> I kid.. i kid.. you're adorable though
Man this poem was suppose to be about religion and stuff , we totally blasphemised it

[Andie]

LMAO! I was thinking that this whole time!! XD I was like 'should we stop?? Nahh!' haha. You're fun. :)

[Andie]

But like you said, you need your beauty sleep. Go to bed child!

[KeeD]

OH fu,ck yes we're both loads of fun xoxo :)

[Andie]

xoxo