Role Reversal

A cut on your skin, yet someone else is bruised Role Reversal, you're in someone else's shoes

Eggs Benedict

Prepared by the wife

Just a simple man

Living a nine to five life

Today the sky is red 

Job to transport the dead

An incident took place three days ago

A girl too young was raped and killed

Gang banging neighborhood

Drugs sex violence, kids up to no good

Area Code demands respect 

kill conquer protect

Blonde hair against the violet felt

Soft eyes reflecting the skyline

Laid in the back of a hearse

Loved ones slowly dispersed 

Set out on a final journey in this world

Me her tour guide taking her to destination dirt

Suddenly I see shining lights

Visions of the wife and children flash before eyes

Walking through the light

Solace over my soul 

A field of sunflowers at my gaze

Haze in the distance still stands glimpse of a girl

Reaching out for my hand, firmly grasping it tight

No longer the feeling of a siberian winter's night

Failing to understand, lifesless touch so tepid

Now guided through heavens door

Panic, breaking hold, Shudder in fear

No, please God, NO!

Eyes awaken in a coffin

Grave Keeper seeking redemption

Commit the sin, repent within

Struggle to bury a past

Scorching heat boils troubled skin

Falling besides me, breath wearing thin

Her name tattooed 

Over his right eye 

Gang member, once a Crip

Forever a Crip till you die

Weight of a lifeless body

Encompasses mine completely 

Dead weight, I suffocate, eyes shut again

Shovel held tight, I elevate Grave Keeper I am

Digging through the mud

Trying to save a soul

Every single strike of shovel against earth

Sinks said soul into an eternal hole

Hell awaits this sinner patiently 

Screams grow louder frantically 

Furnace of flames welcomes body 

Crimes recruit devils new comrade  

Innocent child decends from celestial path

Heavenly smile peaceful aura

Hushes mouth before hint of sound

"Go back, live life, Funeral Director you've done well" 

I awake from deep sleep

Nightmare level now I can complete

Playstation controller in my hand

Role Reversal

(deep breaths)

I figured out how to beat the game

Author's Note

Have you ever played a game that was so hard you played it all night only to fall asleep and dream about it finishing it? :) .

Reviews

[chandlerl]

Your poems are always very strong, this one following suit. =)

[Sethnicity]

I can definitely say yes! I also got the dream state feel while reading... so you used very good tone.
Each stanza seems to be a separate screen shot. Feels as if you were moving through the levels, so the completion is what the poem leans on heavily.
Pretty decent closing and Thanks for the suggestion and I hope to read more this year.

[Shadenfräu]

As a whole, this is fantastic and brilliantly written. What I enjoy most is the last stanza, namely because I didn't see anything about "Playstation controller in my hand" and " I figured out how to finish the game" coming when I went into reading this. Very creative indeed.

[beyondpen]

vicariously traumatized by the suffering of an innocent ... in a movie or reality... almost thinking wishfully, i too picture a reversal of fates for the tormented and the tormentor... but never in my wildest imaginations could i imagine enough to write a poem on it...
great creativity and even greater poetry :)

[KeeD]

You'll be surprised.. I never expect any of my poems to go the direction they end up in.. but once we start writing an idea down it just flows and creates it's own. Thank you so much for the review. Glad to see you on the cafe~ I'll read your work to repay the kindness.

[beyondpen]

true... and thanks :)

[Lover Of Words]

Just lovely!

[Krithika Raghavan]

Beautiful end and I never expected any poem to begin with "eggs" so you get ratings for that... A wonderfully marvellous writing, I wish you luck.

[KeeD]

Haha I'm not a big fan of eggs either :P but hey.. gotta show them some love right?:P thank you for your review

[writing mojo]

I am thinking you are judge, jury, the exquisiteness executioner in this piece, never exiting the rivaled darkness of this amazing, 2nd stanza, it had me slit quick with your word choice of "Today the sky is red Job to transport the dead" and from that moment it held the piece together with well placed reaper cloaked strings, dead dust on the shovel digging thorough the collective negative imagery, I wonder what the camera in a different aura would picture in this dementia....amazing piece

[KeeD]

I really liked this review, It feels like i'm reading poetry about my poetry. Thank you this piece wasn't how I initially intended the idea of the term Role Reversal to play out but once I started writing it just flowed to form this finished product.

[writing mojo]

it's just how i flow when i stumble upon a really good poem...

[KeeD]

I think I could learn a lot from your reviews, you're the kind of writer who can teach and I joined WC to improve and learn and I feel I can learn a lot from you. Thank you for reviewing my work. Much respect, Kee.

[writing mojo]

don't mention it, I am a little cracked but my reflection is always sincere, thanks for not brushing my stick figured scribbled replies aside...I tend to become more clear with each closer look

[Muse]

What a mind trip! The cruelty you speak of...thank gawd karma's a b***h right? Maybe we would all think twice..if we had to relive a moment or two in his or her shoes.

Brilliant.

[KeeD]

Haha indeed she is, but she's a b***h I salute for I now believe in her for her kiss might be deadly but she's always looking out for your best interest.
thank you so much for the kind review.

[Muse]

your work makes me want to return to my mean angry streak of writing.. But not today..the time is not right. I'm trying to melt the cold that winter has been kind enough to share with most of us.

[Kaylee]

Whoa. This is really deep and really intence... You've got a lot of talent.. I love this write.. Wonderful..

[KeeD]

Hey you, Welcome to the cafe~, Thank you for reviewing your work. From viewing your style of writing I see that you're into the dark genre of poetry and that's something I really love and appreciate. I have some dark generic stuff uploaded here, "A Possession, Eternal Damnation, Lufarians shroud and Flight 5150 might be something you'd like" Thank you so much for taking the time to add me and review my stuff, glad to see new talent like you on here. xoxo Kee.

[Kaylee]

Hey :) Thanks! :) Okay, cool, I'll have to check them out. :) No problem, thank you for reviewing my poem. :)

[KeeD]

The pleasure was mine, it was really good.

[Kaylee]

Thank you! ;)

[Samantha ~virginpoet]

intense is all i can say

nice work