Bridge after Coma

Got this idea after reading Muse's poem "Walking Across Water"

I don't feel awake

The first step

It's the hardest

I am incapable of moving past it

Will you take me across

Disillusioned by decisions 

Fragile, I've broken myself 

Carrying my own cross

Hold my hand

I'm shaky and my legs give in

Understand, I'm not ready 

There's too much hurt within

Halfway there

I feel your strength run through me

The cloak of your embrace

I can taste serendipity in the air 

Is God aware

I'm drowning in my own despair 

Held tight by a mother's hold

Feels so warm yet she's so cold

Stay with me still

Only memories are here to stay

Was a time when you said you'd never go away

Then why am I alone

Mama

This is the bridge that's going to take us home

Why am I afraid that you're going to go alone

Another sleepless night 

Can you hear my cries 

Calling out your name

Building bridges just to numb the pain

I never want to forget your face

Is this my fate

To live on without you 

It was my fault 

he took you away

I'm not too late

Mama, I'm taking the bridge to you now

I'll see you as soon as all my blood pours out 

We'll be together, happy again

   Don't text and drive my friends

Reviews

[Andie]

"Hold my hand?
I'm shaky and my legs give in
Understand I'm not ready
There's to much hurt within"

That one's my favorite. It's so versatile, and seems like something I would write.
The picture is really beautiful and seem endless.
Good job Kee. It was very well written. :3

[KeeD]

Thank you Amanda :3 It does seem endless now that I look at it :D

[LA Lorena]

A very create write Keegan. I like what you did with the text here. It felt a little off kilter, but then I realized just how well that worked here. Sometimes it is good for us to feel unsettled, not soothed by words. Accidents costs lives every day, but when they are preventable, it is doubly tragic.

[Baby Ricochet]

Haunting. Good Job Keegan

[Be myself!]

I lost two friends last year in a car accident and one the night before from a motorcycle crash. I will never forget them and neither will anyone else. It only takes one sip to alter your mind.

[KeeD]

I'm so sorry about your friends, I hope you're doing okay and I agree just one sip to alter the mind, any distraction can lead to fatal consequences.

[Be myself!]

Yep. I'm doing okay. Thanks. I liked this a lot.

[KeeD]

Not more than my drool though ryeeeeee?

[Be myself!]

Haha. lol. Idk that's a tough one. lol

[Frieda P]

This is tragic, especially the fact that it came from such a place where something like this could be prevented...I have a real problem with people that text and drive, FTW are they thinking...could kill people and/or themselves, as in evident in this moving piece. I like how you formatted it to the right, feels uncomfortable, which is how we should feel reading this extremely moving write....the music is an excellent choice. All in all its moved me to tears, so you know you've done a great job!

[KeeD]

:D i love that you appreciate that the text is towards the right and presents that uneasiness on the eyes and mind which was exactly why I did it, I edited it for 5 mins just playing with the angels I wanted the text to be represented and I thought yeah this is harder to read but it's a hard to swallow poem anyways. Thank you so much Frieda for this wonderful review, xoxo < 3

[N!LoC]

oh.... epic..... and its so funny that you got inspired by a muse... named "muse".... lol :-)

[KeeD]

Haha yeah life works in mysterious yet hilarious ways :D

[Muse]

And I'm honored..

thank you..

[Muse]

This is amazing stuff! Love the song btw. ;) You take two things into consideration here. 1.Approaching the bridge of the next life...so many questions..is it safe to cross...will I see the ones I miss? And 2. The grief of missing someone so much. The picture with your words is just awesome. Good...no GREAT work my friend.

[KeeD]

It was inspired after talking to you and definitely after reading your poem and the song you used. I was so in love with the piece I had to make it a part of me. You're an amazing writer and i'm honored to have you as a friend on here :)

[Muse]

I'm honored to know and to have the freedom to share with all of you. Free of judgement...free to be me. That "on a personal" note..is priceless. Countless times I have read some of you..or chatted..and my imagination goes wild...I love it when we are inspired by one anothers work.

[Rob Santana]

Man Kee the ending had my eyes watering what emotion and passion. "I carry my own cross "clever wording Kee. You carry your guilt and pain and with pain sometimes comes misery. Strong piece Kee.

[KeeD]

Thank you brother :)

[ms. barrie]

this is an extremely poignant, evocative poem. amazing choice of words, enriched with the imagery of the feelings of helplessness and despair. brilliant write, Keegan...pen on :)

[KeeD]

Thank you Barrie, good to see you again hope you're doing well and hope to read some new writing from you soon :)

[ms. barrie]

you're very welcome, like i stated this is brilliantly written but tugs at your heart very hard while one reads is reading it, which is a good thing. oh i have ideas stirring, one story i am working on a new one (trying) to is called "passionate obsession" -- i hope you and yours are doing good, as well, Keegan, take care :)

[ms. barrie]

p.s. love the accompanying music!