Bonfires

Bonfires

A Poem by KeeD
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(turn your volume down to a mellow low) About time I put out something romantic.For those who've found happily ever after, this ones for you :)

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Bonfires

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 Days are drifting astray

Light it ablaze, close beside you

Is where I want to stay

On the white sands by the Caspian shores

Looking at the night blend in with the waves

Fragments of shells under our feet

Fearless we lay counting the stars

Bonfires take us away

 

To jazzy skies of grey

Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes

Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours

Love like embers implanted in your cheeks

Your fiery smile in the cool breeze

Romantic music sets the mood to please     

Roaring with the wind, screaming your name

Chase after you through the seven seas

Bonfires take us away

 

To a mystical place where the moon and the sun       

Kiss and exchange glances, summer and winter romances

The life within a glimpse of an eye is an eternal lullaby

Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep

Your presence and essence with absence of doubt

Like a candle on a table shedding warmth out  

Bonfires take us away...

...Towards an endless love

 

 


© 2013 KeeD



Author's Note

KeeD

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I saw the pic.the title and I KNEW THIS WOULD BE FANTASTIC WORK. There is something magical and romantic about the glow of a bonfire. The smell...the sparks...it inspires the heat of love.

To jazzy skies of grey
Intoxicated by flames reflected in your eyes
Far far away I hide and seek, forever yours
Love like embers implanted in your cheeks
Your fiery smile in the cool breeze
Romantic music set's the mood to please
Roaring with the wind, screaming your name
Chase after you through the seven seas
Bonfires take us away


I love how you ended every thought with the "Bonfire's take us away" such a fluid read. A favorite.

another thing..Put me to sleep, some dreams I forever want to keep" that saying is worth quoting over and over again...dreams and words to live by. xo

Posted 4 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

+she plays with matches+

4 Years Ago

only tweek...keep reading

...Because we love to the end

maybe instead;
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KeeD

4 Years Ago

let me know if this works :3
+she plays with matches+

4 Years Ago

Yes!!



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Ok so I GUESS this is an older one of yours, seeing as I'm the first to review in forever BUT WHATEVER THIS WAS AMAZING. I love your work and the personality it reflects!
I feel like this is that kind of insecure love you feel at, well, a bonfire party or something in high school, the kind that feels like it lasts forever:) my interpretation anyway.


Posted 4 Years Ago


Maria Linden

4 Years Ago

Wait sorry I fucked up!
That's the featured review k good:)
KeeD

4 Years Ago

Indeed that's what inspired me to write it the absence of such a feeling at such a party. It's the p.. read more
Maria Linden

4 Years Ago

I understand, completely. And you captured the wistful feeling, too.
Kiss and exchance glances , hmmm the poem is giving me ideas, I love it

Posted 4 Years Ago


Romantic, charming and encompasses all that is sweet about love. There are lovely touches of tenderness in places and some very potent imagery. I like the way your poem sways back and forth between warmth and cold, light and darkness, whilst maintaining a peaceful atmosphere throughout. Good use of similes and metaphors to create an impact. Also, some sparing but judicious use of rhyme to keep the flow going smoothly.
My favourite lines here are
"Looking at the night blend in with the waves"
and
"To a mystical place where the moon and the sun
Kiss and exchange glances, summer and winter romances"
Well done, Keegan
Thanks!

Posted 4 Years Ago


This is so beautiful, so romantic, so hypnotizing. I read it like a hundred times, so captivating. And the music and the picture made it even better. Such a powerful write.
100 for this one!

Posted 4 Years Ago


That was poignant, although it lacked imagery in it.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Bhavya Kaushik

4 Years Ago

That was a constructive comment. I still loved this piece; but yes, it lacked imagery according to m.. read more
KeeD

4 Years Ago

Looking forward to learning. Any helpful tips will be appreciated.
Bhavya Kaushik

4 Years Ago

Firstly, try not to rhyme forcefully. Experiment with a genre like free verse, tanka, and so on. Als.. read more
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You took me away with this one, this poem has a great atmosphere and the lines of thought seem to offer a gateway to another realm of possibilities. The beautiful power of fire really comes out in this one, I can feel the heat of it

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

:) that's a really cool review, thank you so much.
Very nice imagery and feelings of romance. I really like the last part:
"Like a candle on a table shedding warmth out
Bonfires take us away...
...Towards an endless love"
The warmth of being with someone special, and the beauty of the surroundings and the sky...you captured this all well in this poem.
Lovely Soundcloud music in your Author's Note as well.

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

:) thank you for your wonderful review, you're a beautiful soul.
Reading this piece makes me crave the sensation of sitting in the sand at night by a bonfire watching the stars. a sort of longing. The love you convey in this hits home for me. I've always found it difficult to put into words this sort of feeling and here you are mastering it. Especially the imagery. I know this isn't to do with the words but I love the way you utilized font and color, makes the imagery stand out even more. And hey, there's those dreams again!

Really, a marvelous piece.

Posted 4 Years Ago


KeeD

4 Years Ago

Thank you, :).
Bonfires take us away...towards an endless love--beautifully said. There is a romance here that I quite needed right about now; it's funny how certain things are put into your lap when you need them the most. I imagine one day to feel this way fully and completely, but I think my mind is too questioning and unaccepting for such things. Well done write, my friend!

Posted 4 Years Ago


Oh my Gosh, I love this! It's so upbeat and peacefu. It makes you think. Beautiful Kee.

Posted 4 Years Ago



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