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Invoke an affair

Invoke an affair

A Poem by KeeD

To tempt thunder
and taste lightning
The world sunders
to a love so exciting 

Your spine is the river
I wish to swim across 
Every stroke uncovers
a star-crossed lovers loss

I feel the heat roaring 
within your volcanic chest
Your heart is soaring  
love no longer suppressed 

My restless ocean
I wish to drown in your embrace
Discovering new emotion
The pretty smile on your face

Through centuries past 
and centuries ahead
My kindred spirit at last
not much left unsaid
 
The sail is set in motion 
been put through the test of time
A heart filled with emotion
aching for the day you'll be mine

© 2017 KeeD



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I often hear lyrics when I read you. You have some lovely poetic lines here, strong imagery and I can feel your emotion in your final lines. Your title is excellent. I always enjoy your work Kee.

Chris

Posted 5 Months Ago


I like the way you use some familiar metaphors, while twisting a word or two that makes the line original again . . . “tempt thunder and taste lightning” . . . “heat roaring within your volcanic chest” . . . “drown my restless ocean in your embrace.” All in all, this is a fine example of SHOWING instead of telling. Your sentiments are stated in unexpected ways, yet the overall sensations are recognizable. It gives the whole reading experience a feeling similar to meeting someone for the first time & watching things unfold, some familiar, some mysterious (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie

Posted 5 Months Ago


beautiful poem. I agree it does have a song structure or at least the first stanza. I LOVE THE OCEAN, SPINE IMAGERY. Good job, Keegan


Posted 6 Months Ago


KeeD

6 Months Ago

Thank you, I have no idea how to write poems in any sort of poetic structure so whatever I write I g.. read more
Lamour

6 Months Ago

your welcome
This would have served as a song, Keegan. It is beautiful.

Posted 1 Year Ago


KeeD

1 Year Ago

Haha, do you have a nice voice? D: sing it for me! Thank you for the wonderful review. Did you ever .. read more
Mirror

1 Year Ago

I am posting page by page. so, yes i have posted another page. i want to spend sometime too to read .. read more
Oh this is so beautiful...I love rhyming and you are so good at it Keegan. My absolutely favorite verse:

My restless ocean
I wish to drown in your embrace
What keeps me floating
Is that look on your pretty face

Mindblowing and more!

Posted 1 Year Ago


KeeD

1 Year Ago

Thank you Divya, have a wonderful evening.
DIVYA

1 Year Ago

You too Keegan. It will be great to read you and I hope the weather is great in Mumbai
i like the near rhyme in the first stanza...really like the metaphor in the second...the spine idea...nicely done there...and uncovering what the star crossed lovers lost...that would be quite exciting, yes...
this is a mystical love poem.
j.

Posted 1 Year Ago


KeeD

1 Year Ago

Not one of my top pieces, but that you for the kind review Jacob.
exquisite imagery and briilant word-weaving. your pen painted a portrait of longings mixed in with myth. this is truly enchanting ~ thank you for sharing ~ X


Posted 1 Year Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

KeeD

1 Year Ago

Thank you for the kind review friend.

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KeeD
KeeD

Mumbai, India, India



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Hi I'm Keegan, most of you talented people on here know me as Kee. I'm 28 and work as a journalist. I write to release bottled feelings, so although it might not be very good, it is me. Thank you for .. more..

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