Inflamed Heart

Torch my scene with kerosene

Insulated by my insecurities 

Write me up for therapy

Signed by your apathy

 

I know you as a deadbeat valentine

Like some put together Frankenstein

I am a lost cause and I got flaws

But until yesterday I was yours

Reaching out to crack the moon

Looking at the sky till the crack of noon

Angry at the universe

Rage fueling every verse

 

Cold blooded, iced heart

I'm twenty-eight and falling apart

I'll see you on the other side

Sayonara to my to-be-bride

 

Reviews

[Najam Us Saher]

Last line hit me hard. You have great talent to express and to make the readers feel your words. Keep it up.

[lightsong]

such rage and anger, deep pain inflamed burning Your words, You did a wonderfully great job delivering these feelings, I don't think anyone will come and read this without feeling them intensely, perfect title and picture to go along Your words, Your poetic spirit shouting out loud here, as a poet all he owns and treasures are His words, so yes, burn me with my words... replace me and them with other ones You may like more... the gentle turning at the last verse shows that love is here, hope is still here... and maybe her heart can soften and lean after reading this tender ending.

well done my friend.

[KeeD]

Hi friend, indeed we certainly treasure our words, for without them we are just blank pages wanting to be filled. Thanks for the wonderful review and kind visit to my page. xo

[Amidrea Ming]

all of your work is so beautiful T.T i feel blessed by your mind's existence

[KeeD]

You're awful sweet, xoxo thank you for the kind review.

[Ardra]

The pain and sadness spill through your words...
Nicely done...enjoyed reading your creation...

[Cheyanne Wheeler]

This piece is my absolute favorite on this site. The way you rhymed every other sentence was perfect. You created a story that was easy to follow and relatable. I love the ending and how you're forewarned your future bride.

[KeeD]

Oh wow that's quite a compliment, I truly appreciate you reading my work let alone enjoying it! Looking forward to reading you creativity when you post something on here, thank you again for the visit.

[Danzig16]

This is amazing. I feel your pain and love the way you write! Thank you for sharing.

[KeeD]

Thank you for reading this and letting me know it makes you feel something, that's all I ever intended with the piece. Thank you again!

[Traci]

Soulful poetry at it's finest Kee. Through pain your pen bleeds truth and honesty, making me feel anger and sadness.

[KeeD]

How are you Traci, it's been a while, hope all is well in your side of the world. Thank you for your humble review.

[ms. barrie]

brilliantly worded, your ink spills a portrait of the slightly scorching rays of disenchantments of love/live, etc, etc.;
we all {at times} can relate to. your word play, and especially (i agree with jacob); rhyming scheme is amazing and has a pleasant lyrical movement to it. {the opening lines would make for killer chorus imo};
always enjoy reading your
soulful poetry.

~ thanks for the read - x

[KeeD]

As soon as you learn that guitar BJ, i'm going to hold you up to singing this piece :P thanks for the awesome blossom review.

[ms. barrie]

you’re most welcomed kee...it was my pleasure and lol ~ xx

[jacob erin-cilberto]

this is like the reverse of Bride of Frankenstein...he wakes up and sees her leaving and starts screaming.
we can all be monsters, especially to each other...it is so good to read you again...this is moving, very clever in its wording and rhyme scheme...and wow, we can feel the powerful rage of being left alone.
j.

[KeeD]

You see beauty in my amateur work and ever better you make me believe my writing is worth something, thank you kind sir.