Best Poetry.  (rhyme or not?)

Best Poetry. (rhyme or not?)

A Poem by Keith
"

Ok, I am having a crack at this too, so here's my 2c worth.

"
Paint a picture
tell a story,
share your sorrow
howl your glory.

Take me where
I've never been,
show me sights
as yet unseen.

Make me laugh
Or make me cry,
if really sad
my tears I'll dry.

Lift my spirit
stir my soul,
arouse my senses
make me whole

These things I seek
in  reading time,
for me its bonus 
with a rhyme.

© 2013 Keith


My Review

Would you like to review this Poem?
Login | Register




Reviews

Maximum impact in a minimum of words. I especially like the first stanza with its "howl your glory" line. I am prejudiced in favor of rhymed poems and think this would have somewhat lesser appeal if it weren't rhymed. Well done.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Like yourself, I only do rhyme Richard. Actually, Shallimar put something out there a few weeks a.. read more
Whatever fits your fancy at the moment is how I go with it...rhyme no rhyme...I write it just the way it comes out...if you feel the verse gets too restrictive...then go all out free verse...I get a feel for a rhyme - but at times that changes in mid drift...and go completely a different direction...or you can have at it more...leaves you with a headache...but again totally up to you the writer...

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

From the work I have read it seems you do both very well. Thanks again for the read and comment Gl.. read more
Glen Yumang Manese

10 Years Ago

Who's counting any way...right...hehehe....you're welcome....
I like rhyme, but need a poem to say something. This covered both points. Great job.

"share your sorrow
howl your glory." -- Nice!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Thank you Mattavelli, I appreciate you dropping in and the kind review.
A unique subject. Love your syntax. This felt very upbeat.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Thanks again Barbara, there were a couple of people kicking this subject around so I had my say.
I loved this write, Keith - Your rhymes were excellent. As you know I am a fan of rhyme - I cannot seem to do anything else - I loved the message you portrayed. Awesome blossom as always!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Then you are missing something special, suggest you go take a look.
s y e

10 Years Ago

I will do.
Keith

10 Years Ago

Some of her work is rated as as Mature 18+ (I am sure you will skip those). Apparently she also sta.. read more
I really love your word choice and format of this piece its truly a great write, keep penning

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much DB, I appreciate you dropping in.
I like this. I am one for rhyme and meter myself as if no one knew. It has long been my premise that music and meter and rhyme are interlinked In such a way. It is the reason we remember song lyrics But not speeches. Surely a different part of the brain controls music and the arts.

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

I had no doubt where you sat on this matter Tate. I totally agree with you premise there.
Really good metered rhymed verse, Keith, and your poem sings because of it. Poets over the centuries have used meter and rhyme to make their poems lyrical - nothing wrong with it unless you want to get published in "The New Yorker" and good luck with that! lol This is an upbeat poem that makes you feel good to read it. Great job!

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Thank you again Joyce.
Great rhyme and flow. I'm impressed

Posted 10 Years Ago


Keith

10 Years Ago

Thanks so much BR much appreciated, especially from one of your talents.
Wonderful flow rhyme and thumbs up messages! Bravo Keith, couldn't agree more!
And hey!! You live in my part of the world! I am in Victoria too although further north!

Posted 10 Years Ago


wordwarrior

10 Years Ago

Oh Thanks Keith I will read his work. I live about a half hour south of Bendigo
Keith

10 Years Ago

Thats called Melbourne these days isn't it? (Just kidding).
wordwarrior

10 Years Ago

Haha Melbourne is about an hour and a half from here . LOL

First Page first
Previous Page prev
1
Share This
Email
Facebook
Twitter
Request Read Request
Add to Library My Library
Subscribe Subscribe


Stats

1198 Views
30 Reviews
Rating
Shelved in 1 Library
Added on August 24, 2013
Last Updated on August 24, 2013

Author

Keith
Keith

Gippsland, Victoria, Australia



About
I grew up on a diet of Australian bush poetry. Now a business consultant, I spend far too much time on aeroplanes and in hotels, I use this time to write. I like to tell stories and have fun. If y.. more..

Writing
The Cottage The Cottage

A Poem by Keith



Related Writing

People who liked this story also liked..