The Poet

It's been more than a month since I last wrote or posted anything...

Let them have their plots and plays
Cast and conducted behind my stage
Have they the will and words to brave
Before my eyes I bid they wage

Before my eyes I bid they wage
A war regardless of sex and age
Before their eyes for all to see
Their world besieged to humility

Behind the stage, Where I'm never in sleep
Nor think of wildly in whim or mull
Is where the angels gather to weep
Over the congregation of judas's skull

Over the congregation of judas's skull
The world will pass in a nonchalant lull
Their hearts of truth, valorous in spirit
As actors on stage they often find no merit

Merit in essence is an invaluable art
Of twisting emotions and honesty, a knave
In perfection it moves mountains and hearts
In foibles you dig yourself, your grave

In foibles you dig yourself, your grave
The prophet who failed at being a knave
Your epithet will read for the audience to know it
"The fool who tried to outwit a poet"

Reviews

[TL Boehm]

the fool who tried to outwit a poet. great line. I found the technical level of this poem to be quite interesting. It almost has the feel of a sestina in the way the lines are repeated. Well done.

[guy drori]

Amazing choice of words... and good written stanzas too. The way you used rhyming allowed the poem to have a natural flow. I really enjoyed this my friend ;) I was also very fond of this line- "Their hearts of truth, valorous in spirit As actors on stage they often find no merit ."

[Kamari's]

Amazing just amazing! The form magnificent, and the write just beautiful the lyrics rhyme together a beautiful harmony of a poet. I just love this

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Kamari :)

[Tricia Pattinson]

Well written and interesting reading. There is much to savor in the lines and your vision as written. Thank you for sharing.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Tricia

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good tale in the poem. I enjoyed the conversation and the description.
"In foibles you dig yourself, your grave
The prophet who failed at being a knave
Your epithet will read for the audience to know it
"The fool who tried to outwit a poet"
A very good ending to the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Coyote.... I'm glad you liked the end... It was my favourite part as well...

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good ending and you are welcome.

[Confuser]

Interesting, it sounds almost satirical and I like it; especially the ending, the way you continued with the poem, which was almost, maybe because you referred to stage, theatrical as if you knew what they were doing, and forget THAT! You are Mac Daddy, aware of all, the boss hog, Humm, in follibles you dig yourself, your grave, Merit in essense is an invaluable art of twisting emotions and honesty, a knave In perfection it moves mountains and hearts, In foibles you dig yourself, your grave....in oddities, humm, the character is so arrogant, and seems to laugh aloud at all those; "the fool who tried to outwit a poet." Sounds a little Shakepearean. The repeating lines emphasized your point. I enjoyed it. Thank you.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Confused... And I do hope you tell me your name... I love that you found the shakperian influence in my poem... All the world's a stage and we are merely actors...I tried to take base of that writ and bring out the 21st century corporate life I lead as a manager... Thank you so much.. MeYou have no clue how much it means to me, the fact that you saw Shakespeare in there.. Thank you... Thank you...

[Confuser]

Dawg, man, it hit me between the eyes like tiger nd then, I saw your job. My name is Dale, no secret! I didn't know the type of repeating lines you used so I had to look up something save it to favs for later. Sortof OCD about knowing things, but may forget the next day. Great writing. Tks.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Hahahaha we have have something in common then... The thirst for knowledge

[Confuser]

Yes, however, unlike you, I may not remember our conversation tomorrow. I'm like the scarcrow, and globs of gray matter have been degrading since the birth of my son 14 yrs ago. Anyway, have a nice day...

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

You too my friend

[Confuser]

Thank you Kenneth! Guten Tag.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Guten haben.. Fräulein

[Confuser]

Now, I have to go to google translate for a response - no way. Aunt & Uncle German and I worked for one. Love the language. Am learning a little Dutch from Rudi (here), sounds a lot like German. Bye.

[Emily]

I love the first line!
Keep it up!

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Emily... Can I ask for your critical review of this poem? I've read your work throughly and it would be an honour if you would tell me where I could improve... Pretty please?

[Emily]

Sure, if you would like me to. I looked over your poem again and the only thing I could think of is that maybe add more details or like discirbe more what is happing. I hope that helped.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

You know, I've always thought that I'm being too vague in my writing... That I do not bring clarity to my reader as much... I shall work upon that... Thank you Emily... Looking forward to being paired up 😊

[Emily]

Your welcome!

[Rene Salinas]

Haven't seen you in a while mate.

Hope all is well.

I will try to guess here but if memory serves me right you decided to go for a Pantoum? I think it was called... Ok not really sure there but that in itself offers a challenge as they all need to be for line stanzas or quatrains I think they're called so constricting in a sense but the end result far from it.

The "skip and bounce" is far from limiting, and the fluidity came rushing at me with wit and even a little satire, also some "corrosive" manouvering really. As you share that in sincerity and in honesty you may come but you are not impervious to some. In goodness they may perceive yet that doesn not make you asleep or unaware. Quite the contrary. So please "don't try to pull a fast one on me" sort of thing.

Very creative Kenneth

Thank You.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

You got the nail right on the head... Thank you Rene

[Norah]

This is profound..great poem!

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you Norah

[Prabha Salimath]

Wonderful piece in here Kenneth no more words.

In foibles you dig yourself, your
grave
The prophet who failed at being a
knave
Your epithet will read for the
audience to know it
"The fool who tried to outwit a poet". Such a great lines you penned with great knowledge and perfect words.

[Kenneth Nicholas Lowe]

Thank you prabha