Hide and Seek

 

I've been planning to change,

Forever and a day.

Yet I'm still so strange,

I'm still so strange.

 

I'd been planning to leave,

For a long, long time.

Still, I never said goodbye.

I never said goodbye.

 

Words that come from a dark, dark place,

Scream of a pain you can't quite face.

 

 

Can you see me?

Can you hear me now?

No one will ever forget my name.

Got to make you proud of me somehow.

 

 

I've been planning to forget,

Forever and a day.

Yet I can't make it go away.

I can't make it go away.

 

I'd been planning to move on,

For a long, long time.

Still, I committed the crime,

And I'll serve the time.

 

Words that come from a dark, dark place,

Whisper of a hurt you ache to embrace.

 

 

Can you see me?

Can you hear me now?

No one will ever forget my name.

Got to make you proud of me somehow.

 

 

I don't care for you.

I don't care.

I don't care for me.

I don't, I don't...

 

 

Can you see me?

(Can you see me?)

Can you hear me now?

(Can you see me?)

No one will ever forget my name.

Got to make you proud of me...

 

Can you see me?

(Can you see me?)

Can you hear me now?

(Can you see me?)

No one will ever remember my name.

Got to make you scared of me...

Somehow...

 

 

I don't care...

I don't...

 

Reviews

[Sagar Waingankar]

haha ... scaring people uh? Yet it's good you speak up, as most of others just hide inside them and later blasts at one! Your writings asks me to call you a 'Mystical Writer' :P

[:DI laugh too much:D]

wow, this was awesome! I loved how you repeated certain words, and I loved the overall feel of the poem. it felt mysterious, and once I got to the end it was like the narrator was disappearing into fog or something, and their voice was echoing as they said the last lines.

great job! :]

[luna11]

I love this :)
It would make a really good song. I like the lines "Words that come from a dark, dark place, Scream of a pain you can't quite face."
Well done
xx

[Revolutionary]

I have alot of lyrics written before the music.I find nobody can write the music I hear in my head.I can't play an instrument or I would try myself.This will make a great dark metal song.The words describe the way I hope my child never feels,and I am sure kids who feel lost in their purpose will identify with this song.Great job

[Suditi]

This would make such a nice song! :)

[Caitlin Lea]

It definitely works as a song. The phrase "forever and a day" is a little cliche, but I think it works within this poem. I like this, and would love to hear the song!!

[I Am Svetlana]

It would make the beautiful song and these lyrics are wonderful. It tells a story of a lost soul, one of wanting to forget because he doesn't care anymore and one that wants to make someone proud. You can't accept yourself if you live to make others around you proud, you must embrace who you are and find out your own happiness and make yourself proud. It doesn't matter what others think about you...as long as you know who you are inside. That's all that matters and that's all that counts in this life we live today.

[Monica]

I like it and I can hear it with music. The picture is a perfect reflection of your words!

Words that come from a dark, dark place,
Scream of a pain you can't quite face.

Can you see me?
Can you hear me now?
No one will ever forget my name.
Got to make you proud of me somehow.

powerful!! ...so painful to try and be something to someone...
Very well written, you should be proud of this one!

[R.A. Youngblood]

It's strange, but wonderful.. I really like your style!
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up :D

[Ayaz chandio]

very nicely written.GREAT JOB.