Blind

 

How come you can't see me?

 

I'm not blind,

I'm just unkind.
I know exactly what my words do.

I'm not insane;

I'm choking on the pain.

How come you can't see me?

 

I'm not blind;

As shadows aligned,

I saw the mask upon your face.

I'm not blind.

I've kissed mankind,

And I can see exactly what you do.

 

I'm not quiet,

I'm totally silent.

How come you can't see me?

I'm not blind,

I'm undefined.

I'm rough around the edges.

 

I'm not lost,

I've seen the cost.

I just don't care enough to save a falling star.

 

I'm not blind.

But you are.

 

You are.

 

Reviews

[Coyote Poetry]

I like the use of repetition in this poem. I like the directness and the strong statements. Sometime I wish I could tell people the truth. I believe better to be silence then knock someone down with words or action. No weakness in this outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Sagar Waingankar]

Much out of anger! This one contains serious emotions but reading a word wrong made me think about it quite strong (below lines):

"I'm not lost,
I've seen the coast."

[I Am Svetlana]

We are often disappointed in those who we think should know us better than they act sometimes. But if they don't know us better, then they simply don't deserve us or our time for them.

[Neva Flores - Changeful..]

Fantastic use of emotions.....anger displayed fantastically.

[R.A. Youngblood]

"I'm not quiet,
I'm totally silent.
How come you can't see me?
I'm not blind,
I'm undefined.
I'm rough around the edges."

This is emotional poem! I specially like the third stanza..And the end is powerful and outstanding, and it's well penned!
In so many ways, it's wonderful..
Thanks for sharing..Keep it up! :D

[pinpen]

I like it, it presents a good strong point.

[Ink Angel]

I love the end, it holds so much power. Im not quiet Im totally silent love this stanza. Welldone. Thanks for sharing.

[Caitlin Lea]

This is interesting. If your intent was to verbally slap someone in the face I think this is successful. I feel rather...well, slapped in the face by this. I think the great thing about this one is that it makes me THINK, and I love poems like that.

[Suditi]

Your words are so powerful Kes. The way you pen down emotions.. Its so intense.
A truly beautiful poem.

[Monica]

I like your poem. Your words are strong and direct...passionate about being yourself / acceptance from another...Sometimes, I have found that it's those closest to us that can not see who we really are. Maybe (I hope), your words will be heard and that person will take a step back...and remove their mask.

I'm not blind;
As shadows aligned,
I saw the mask upon your face.
I'm not blind.
I've kissed mankind,
And I can see exactly what you do.

...I love it! As Always, you do not disappoint, you have penned your feelings perfectly!!