if anything

6.28.2007 (5)

 

If anything.

 

if ears were cones that you

could place coins in, gumballs

would fall from noses and

ice cream would pour from mouths

 

if hands were rakes that you

could scoop leaves with, nails

would turn brown and painted

houses could be built for others

 

if eyes were gelatin you

could dye them with food color

and you could land on mine

when you fall, you could be safe

and be stained loving green

 

if our hearts were molded

from cookie cutters they

would be the same sharp

shape, crispy golden and

homemade, we could frost

each others souls and

taste each others love

 

 

 

Kevin M. Reader

Reviews

[Heavyhearted]

so i guess candyland does exist somewhere.in my mind i see wonderful worlds, ones that we do not live in, worlds with less pain and with more joy and love. this poem is a representation of a free soul gliding about in its own world. great people like modigliani dance to their own music that exists only in their heads.

[R J Askew]

I couldn't get into this one as much as the last two of yours I read. I don't think it is as strong as 'I wear' nor as baroque, at least for me. And I think the other one about the ankle momento is really strong emotionally. So those other two poems sort of push this one out of the nest...but that's just me. It's odd, i have just read this one but it is definitely the other two poems i have in my head.

[Whisperer]

This is quite amazing. I think I have discovered a new great writer on this site. I loved the metaphors. It was brilliant all through, especially the starting paragraph! It startles the reader with its uniqueness and leads even the sceptics on...
Very well done!

[Raven Held]

This is an awesome read, Kevin. You incorporated the things associated to our childhood, and in this way created a sense of innocence. The love thus seems to be innocent - a delicacy.

Very well-crafted. Thanks for sharing!

Loves,
Raven

[rachel D]

i have been reading your suff for the past 15 minutes or so. you've got a great style and obviously tons of talent! this one i have come back to a few times. i think i have to favorite it...

"if ears were cones that you
could place coins in, gumballs
would fall from noses and
ice cream would pour from mouths "

these are just 4 of the greatest lines of poetry i've ever read

[Jane]

Totally inlove with the last paragraph
of your poem!

"if our hearts were molded
from cookie cutters they
would be the same sharp
shape, crispy golden and
homemade, we could frost
each others souls and
tastes each others love"

especially the last line about
tasting each others love.
That sounds so delicious, that
even no cookie or frosting
could compare too.

wow :)

~Jane

[Jillian Alexis (has bee..]

ah i loved this one!
def one of my favorites..
i think i say that about a lot of your writing haha.
I have some feedback on your book as well that i will write you tmrw.
I read it on the plane on my way home from vaca..
it was great!

[Jessica L Auster]

Beautiful.
"if our hearts were molded
from cookie cutters they
would be the same sharp
shape, crispy golden and
homemade, we could frost
each others souls and
tastes each others love"

That was amazing, and my favorite part.

[A. Dylan Okopny]

Imaginative..creative..fantastic metaphors..vivid adjectives and nouns enforce the main theme..
Very amazing representation of love, care, and joy in the world!
A.

[Raef C. Boylan]

Some fantastic speculation here; very vivid images induced by your choice of wording.

Good maintanence of your analogies throughout each stanza...although i don't quite understand
"and painted
houses could be built for others"...is it suggesting hands as all tools, not just rakes?

Overall, this is a fun read, and also kind of exciting because of how clear the pictures are.
Great art.
Thanks for sharing it with us.

p.s.
"each others" (i'm not 100% sure, but think it should be other's...check though, the context here might be different).