Deaths and devils dine

I don’t wanna die, can you save me from this life of mine?

To dine with the devil is what I see for me.

So I beg thee come save me.

To dine and die is not where I want to be.

So come save me.

I feel deaths shadow and the devils lingering mind.

So I beg of thee come save me.

The hollowed crypt beckons me, and the table I see.

So come save me.

The bony fingers upon my flesh take me to the devils bed where I may forever rest.

So I beg of thee come save me……..

Reviews

[Mark]

A plea for salvation as though there is no choice? I think this is very well constructed and underneath there is running a current of hopelessness. It makes me feel uneasy, because I always want to believe there is hope.

Please don't take that to mean I did not like your work. I think it's well done, and I don't think I have to like the subject of a poem to recognize that. :)

[Kiari Sabon]

thank you :) and i was trying for a sense of there being no hope for this child begging for a way out but forsaken to the devil himself. I thought it would make the readers feel for the lost soul

[CHRIS ANDES]

it's really my dream to write in old english
good thing you have the talent =]

[Kiari Sabon]

not when ur already conidered the devils and not ur own but thatk u

[Tabitha t]

I love this. very descriptive and give you goosee bumps. But the only thing is isnt the devil sup[posed to seduce you to where you dont want to be saved. I love this write tho. one of my favs

[Roze Collions]

the devil may be a gentleman but he can be a liitle harsh on rebelion

[Mockingbird]

very dark and gothic. it's like being in a nightmare you can't wake up from. i can understand the fear of a bleak death. perhaps it's not so bad to dine with the devil...'the devil is a gentleman' after all.

[Heromen Selena]

Nice. Very dark and foreboding. I love it :)