Stand!

My friend lived it but my words said it..

Stand!

She closed her eyes and faded away.

Never would have dreamed it would happen this day.

Being a woman is hard enough.

Making it in this world is extremely tough.

He took something from her she can’t get back.

But never will she give up and that’s a fact.

She will continue to become the better woman you see.

So nobody can ever steal from her she’s free.

Her God has brought her a mighty long way.

She thanks him each and every day.

She stood up for what was right.

Now its her turn to fight.

Not for her but for girls before.

So they will have the same courage to stand and walk

through the same door.

She will not sleep.

She will not rest her feet.

She will not eat.

Until this matter is over.

Then this is when she will have closure.

-Kiki J

Author's Note

Ignore grammar problems, What do you think?

Reviews

[Wolfwind]

You've got a very dynamic flow that brings with it alot of power in the lines... however, the piece doesn't reflect where this power is being a source from or too. I would suggest adding something that at least hints to what the poem is about. As it is right now, it might be about someones passing in this life, bringing inspiration to others.... or it could be someone taking the initiative to start up a movement to change something in the world. There is alot it might be. If you were going for that vague expression, than you did it so wonderfully.

Thanks for sharing your ink!
Aaron - Wolfwind

[Kiki J]

First constructive review I love it.. Thanks for taking the time out and giving me your wonderful feed back will keep everything youve said in mind.. Thanks Love!

Kiki J

[Belle]

Very feminist. You have a strong yet gentle voice. Stand up for it.

I see you are new. Welcome to this bountiful site! I hope you'll find joy in reading and sharing your pieces of art. If there is something you would like to ask you have my inbox. Again, welcome!

[Kiki J]

Thank you so much.. I cant wait to share more and read more.. Thanks Again!

kiki J