Thirsty amid the sea

Waves carry me home

I can't dwell sea no more

Send me a man among the norm

Carry me to that golden shore

How longer this ship can carry me

More than days it's seen storms

Widowed hundreds so it roams

As I sail in the darkest sea 

Open ocean yet never free

One day calm, another in rage

Vast and wide, as an empty page

Yet no other place to be

You can outrun devil; outrun Lucifer

for one to live one must suffer

Oh bloody sea, your love is a crime

Still I can't out run the hands of time

Would you be my spacious grave

Would you burry me now

Would you take me to my awe

With the next wave

Or to her arms will you take me

For oceans I see in her eyes

Your waves are safer than her cries

And I'll always be the thirsty man amid the sea

Author's Note

Reviews are welcomed

Reviews

[Janna Nicole]

"Open ocean yet never free
One day calm, another in rage"

Hmmm... That sounds like me. Maybe that's why I like that line so much. Lol.
A gentle wave to carry me home sounds so peaceful. Especially after a rage.
I couldn't stay long anyways... I'm a fire element. :P

[Cherrie Palmer]

the want-n plea of home and land, what a wonderful flow full of image of a easy pace that leads the reader, letting each wave break on th horizon. Loved it.

[TL Boehm]

that line - a thirsty man amid the sea - cloaked desperation. Much like being alone in a room of strangers. It is palpable. There is something about the sea that terrifies...but this is a wonderful write.

[M.Kilani]

Thank you for your review, yes the sea is very terrifying, exactly like solitude among many strangers, I'm glad you find the poem wonderful,
thanks again.
Mohammad

[David Scott]

Ah... "water water everywhere but not a drop to drink".
I liked the mystic in your pen. The line, "I can't dwell sea no more" reads odd to my eye.
"How longer this ship can carry me", likewise reads odd.
I got the meaning well and I have no other advice to add to this.
I want to ask why after I read this. Why must we find ourselves adrift in the vast sea?
Maybe you gave your answer in the fourth stanza... Not sure I would agree with the thought, but it is a common proposition.
Wonderful mind behind this write.

[M.Kilani]

Thank you for the review, it's always a pleasure to get feedback, especially from new friends.
You are right about the odd lines, the language of seamen is a bit odd, especially when the dwell the sea for long.
Thank you again.

[Coyote Poetry]

A amazing poem. I like the journey you took me with you. The strong description took me to thoughts and locations. I like the use of the sea. Thank you for the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[M.Kilani]

Thank you my friend, I'm glad I manged to deliver the image, and I'm really glad you en joyed the poem.