The Beast called Terrorism

Self Explanatory. Reviews are much appreciated. Thank you for reading.

What is this heavy feeling, weighing down on us?
Crushing, suffocating and slowly killing us?
Hostages taken, victims made and families torn,
Executions, death and cataclysmic destruction,
All for a broken dream called Religion.

What do these zealots want? Why do they do this?
Is it, to taint the good name of that religion?
Is it, to spread despair and death in their wake?
They say they preach Religion; but in the end,
It's just mindless, sinful slaughter.

They make demands and oppress us.
They steal, plunder and rampage, to satisfy their insanity.
Waging wars and dragging innocents to their battlefield,
Causing their own creed to suffer disgrace.
They call it Religion, We call it Terrorism.

Reviews

[winter;lyra]

"All for a broken dream called Religion. " my favourite line, religion itself is a wonderful thing, a wonderful thing that is supposed to bring believers together and spread common knowledge and love, yet humans, erratic as they are, use it mainly to divide people and spread intolerance, causing conflict, causing terrorism. This coming from a non-religious person, I follow no god or religion, but I know religion is a beautiful thing and I know terrorism is just another way (of the many) for humans to propagate their hatred. This isn't hard to understand, I don't why it is not common sense. Anyway, good job David, you're the first to make me write such a long review.

[KingDavid]

Thanks for reviewing this piece Winter. ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard subject.
"Causing their own creed to suffer disgrace.
They call it Religion, We call it Terrorism."
I agree. In the name of religion, many had die and fought. Very hard to grasp. One day we will learn. One earth and one planet. Every life is a light of hope. Every child should have a fair chance to live.
Thank you for sharing the excellent poetry.
Coyote

[KingDavid]

Thanks for sharing your opinion with me @coyotepoetry . ^_^

[Coyote Poetry]

A hard topic. Hard to see peace for my kids. My father left me his wars and now I leave wars for my children. I did no better or worst.

[KingDavid]

Coyote, It's a fate that no one can change. Everyone will end up leaving their wars to their children to solve.

[Coyote Poetry]

Yes, you are correct.

[barleygirl]

I always prefer straightforward writing to symbolic. A poem such as yours is approachable by most (except the terrorists themselves). You've painted a picture of our world besieged by violence, questioning what it's all about. I think most non-terrorists would agree with your assessment of how it is & how it feels. This poem does not actually attempt any real understanding, even tho questions are posed as to the meaning of it all. When you describe what terrorists do & say (all of it true & well-expressed), it does not further the understanding of what prompts terrorists to choose this path. Your poem describes most of us, dazed & confused, none of it making any sense. Many terrorists are very much disenfranchised in their lives & in their worlds, so they join terrorist organizations for a sense of purpose. It makes sense, given their limited view of life. It would be interesting for you to show us the other side of this equation, too. Not that your interpretation is lacking. You've summed it up very well for those of us being baffled by this murderous phenomenon.

[KingDavid]

Thank you for your opinion @barleygirl ^_^

[Anindita Janhabee]

After a long time, I did get such a wonderful poem based on reality. I appreciate poems on reality because I usually don't write reality poems. All my poems are imaginary except for one or two pieces. Actually, the words used in this poem like religion, creed, slaughter, rampage, terrorism etc. describe the poem to its best. Very well thought and penned.... Really wonderful........ I would like to suggest you for some more poems based on reality out of the modest, keep on writing, thanks for sharing.........

[KingDavid]

Thank you ^_^ . I will.

[Bear]

Very well said, the words religion and war go hand in hand all throughout history, it is as if they can't be content till there is only one. These representatives of deities torture, maim and kill in the name of these Supreme Being to show how pious they are. How does that make sense unless you are worshiping a god of war and if that is the truth how can there ever be a winner until we are all vanquished? Bravo! I give it five out of five Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap! Clap!

[KingDavid]

Thanks for the review Bear. I just thought about the hypocrisy in their dealings and it turned out to be a good topic.

[luvs2write]

To be honest, I don't really review poetry that often. I find that poetry is kind of like painting. Each person has there own opinion, emotion, and style. I will say that this is a very powerful piece. I think many people question terrorism...the world just seems so out of order these days. If I could tell you one thing to look out for it would be commas. Keep in mind that a comma indicates a pause. Read it out loud, see if things need to be changed to make it more flowing. Great job with this! Always keep writing.

[KingDavid]

Do you think there are too many pauses? I kinda intended this poem to be a slow reading type. Thanks for your opinion.

[luvs2write]

I don't think there are too many pauses. For me, when you said "Is it, to taint...." that pause was just a little oddly placed. Like I said, a lot of poetry "rules" is just opinion. If it sounds good to you, I'd say keep it! It is your writing, after all.

[KingDavid]

I added that pause on purpose Lol. Yep I agree, poetry is all a matter of opinion!

[harlem_knight]

Interesting and brutal honest perspective. I like! I challenge you to write it's antithesis.

[KingDavid]

I accept.... but only after I find out what it means LOL.

[harlem_knight]

lmao thats real. all im sayin is write an opposite perspective on religion

[KingDavid]

Lol alright. As long as I get the time, and the inspiration Lol.