Through These Eyes

I see things...
Spirits, hatred, love, anger.
People, animals, safety, and danger.
I see these things.

I've seen,
Death, Life, Sadness, pain.
Fire, earth, wind, and rain.
These things I've seen.

I want to see...
The face of a newborn, the smile of a lover,
Happiness throughout the world,  And a world without hunger.
These I want to see.

I will never see...
A world without pain, nor the year 3000.
The smile of one long gone, nor the face of my great-great-great-granddaughter's husband.
These, I shall never see.

Author's Note

Just wrote this in 5 minutes. What'd'ya think?

Reviews

[Riley Bray]

For five minutes, this is exceptionally done. I've really never thought about not seeing the year 3000 or my descendants fiancees, but you're absolutely correct. The only thing I have to say critique-wise is just that it doesn't seem finished, almost as if there's something important you're missing. Good job though!

[Betty]

Wow, for a 5 minutes write this is EXCELLENT!! I loved the rhythm it creates as you read it out loud, and the imagery is just wonderful.

[TL Boehm]

WOW! Takes me five minutes to get my brain focused on the page....this was great

[lee von cleef]

kiss the earth we are here now. still and again.

[Nick.B]

I think all of us wants to see a fresh new world without any problems, anyway great poem it has it's dark feeling, great job

[Becky C Strukamp]

A 5 minutes well spent. Who says you have to sit down for hours and compose a brilliant poem. This is great. I love the way you penned each stanza, " the things I see, Things I've seen, things I want to see, things I will never see. A clever poem and great work.

[Alex Vidmar]

Thank you.

[Spookers]

This is very good. I like this. It is something a lot of people can relate to

[C.C. Marx]

It really makes me think about all the things I've seen in my relatively short life here on earth....great job!!

[Sami Khalil]

I want to see...
The face of a new born,
the smile of a lover.
Nice write.

[Coyote Poetry]

A very good poem. In a life we will learn many things. I like the examples of things missed and not to be seen. A strong ending to the outstanding poem.
Coyote