Hold me

Hold me

A Poem by Kittyskittles
"

Life throws you challenges and the storm is strong but don't let go of me.

"

Love is pure and kind

It makes my heart boom

Oh, will you stay with me tonight

The air is thin but I can still breathe

Forever with your mouth on me

Our love is my home

It's the one thing I know

The storm is violent but you hold me tight

I know I have to face the storm outside

But, will you please just hold me tonight



© 2015 Kittyskittles


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holding on to something is often a salve to move us from day to day
with our pens we forge that possibility, moving from yesterday into tomorrow



-Dream

Posted 8 Years Ago


Kittyskittles

8 Years Ago

exactly! Thank you.
This is a nice poem describing what you need too ease through the night!
Line#4 breath(e)
Line#3 Oh, comma
Line#4 but, comma (will?)
Line#8 but, comma (will?)
Line#10 But, comma
Once again, I like the poem but, some grammar is always required

Posted 8 Years Ago


Kittyskittles

8 Years Ago

Thank you so much for the comments and the grammar help!!! I edited it and applied the chances. So a.. read more
Perkele.7885

8 Years Ago

I think you missed on your editing dear, please check periods are not commas and the other suggestio.. read more
Kittyskittles

8 Years Ago

Oh, I hit the wrong button in a rush. My bad

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Added on August 11, 2015
Last Updated on August 13, 2015
Tags: love, home, hugs, heart

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Kittyskittles
Kittyskittles

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Hey! My names Alex and I have recently found out that I adore writing. I have always wrote little poems when I feel sad but lately I'm starting to realize how much I truly love writing. more..

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