Look In The Dark

Cover the windows.

Close the door;

Seal it shut.

Blow out the candles;

Take away the flame.

Make it dark.

Dark.

Unseeing.

Gone.

Then stop,

Listen.

Whisper with me;

Hear our voices

Speaking to the silence-

Raw.

Open.

Alive.

It’s me. I’m here.

A shadow.

A caress.

A gentle breeze

On the still air.

Believe.

It’s me.

It’s you.

Always you

Looking in the dark

Seeing me

Looking back.

A mirror

Set among the eyes,

Harbored upon your face.

You see yourself,

In the dark.

Sitting alone.

Mad.

Reviews

[Criss ;)]

omg....!!
This's really a great stuff, u made it from ur heart...wow, this's real..........u know wht...i loved this piece from my heart much, here in this poem, you opened your heart n you expressed here ur some feeling towards someone when you're in dark n miss him a lot......
you expressed here that how much u love sb.....n how much u got ur feelings towards sb...........wow.....what a great write..........hope one day i could write such kinda a piece......

you know what i liked here ur these lines much
stop,
Listen.
Whisper with me;
Hear our voices
Speaking to the silence-
Raw.
Open.
Alive..........
ahh......what a lovely stanza......totally touchable. one......here you expressed that you don't wanna listen but you wanna whiperness.....in ue ears from him....you want to talk...you want to touch him in dark.......you want to stay sometime alone with him,....that's all what i got from here.........lovely write....

but hey.......i got one more thng frm here, i think you're still in love....lol...isn't it.........???????????????????????????????????????????

well penned, great write,
have this now from my heart, 105/100 ;)
much love.......!!
you know what when i was readin' it, i really did make some view of your poem....and really it's a good one...!!
loved it...

[Nikki Richardson]

I loved this. Seriously it's a way of telling someone to sit down, shut up, and take a hard look at their own insanity before judging someone else's. I have a deep appreciation for this poem.

[Jaffa Forbes]

Good use of structure - well thought out.

[koty bell]

A great write.... Wonderful piece.. Mysterious and awesome

[Sami Khalil]

Good writing. Intense one...:)

[Beck Louise]

Great imagery in this, I really enjoyed reading it, well done :)

[Ziara]

Great writing, I can picture myself in the poem. Such strong feelings. Well done.