Flamenco on the wind

Flamenco on the wind

A Poem by Christie Moses

Ache hitchhikes to bold intoxication

Borrow crimson stain on external page

Wail like a panther’s wild declaration

Sail silver tempest feel this sorrow rage

 

Raw bittersweet this splintered whiskey ride

Suggestive thighs kinetic…dance for you

Lament of naked “no more can I hide”

Flagrant flamenco….primitive debut

 

“Forget me nots” entwined in auburn hair

Erotic rhythms …body sweat collide

Behold a sad eyed misfits disrepair

Those fiery magma eyes that pierce inside

 

        Catch this rapid pitch of flawless falling

                 Tidal wave of fate on zephyrs calling


© 2011 Christie Moses



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Christie Moses
English Sonnet

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Mult-layered lines, filled with color and life; intrinsically woven throughout is a tapestry of longing and mystery. Without saying too much or too little, this poem brings a nice overtone of pleasure, as delicately conjured within is search for something more, perhaps for satisfaction.

Best of the rest...!



Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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Well implemented in this sonnet...
I liked the introduction line:

Ache hitchhikes to bold intoxication

...the rest just fills in the void...
the ending 2 lines seals the deal:

Catch this rapid pitch of flawless falling
Tidal wave of fate on zephyrs calling

...the rhyme scheme is there...
and the syllable count:

Those fiery magma eyes that pierce inside???

has 11 here....but I still give this a thumbs up...
well crafted and made for an intricate read...

Posted 3 Years Ago


My hair is auburn, it's beginning to turn grey now. lol Between that and "magma" eyes, I was hooked.

Posted 3 Years Ago


Raw bittersweet this splintered whiskey ride

Suggestive thighs kinetic…dance for you

Lament of naked “no more can I hide”

Flagrant flamenco….primitive debut

Love your style of writing brilliant and elegant. Thanks for sharing

Posted 3 Years Ago


A beautifully executed sonnet...any reference with whiskey would get my attention and a Southern touch that is very appealing.

Posted 4 Years Ago


Superb sonnet to bring into the life the Spanish folk music and dance from the region of Andalusia in southern Spain. The special form of entertainment that includes cante, toque, baile and palmas and which is recognized by UNESCO as one of the Masterpieces of the Oral and Intangible Heritage of Humanity may be promoted by your outstanding poem.
Dear Christie,I pronounce Congratulations,Congratulations,Congratulations!!!

Posted 4 Years Ago


you write with indepth lingusitic supremecy, i'm really impressed!

Posted 5 Years Ago


whoa this is just stunning. Dances with the most intricate pattern of emotions, flairs with those flashes of sensuality that grip like only stark innermost hunger can, but at the same time speaks candidly of a woman's needs. You so artfully decorate your work with the raw energy of passion, but shadow with the angst of fiercely burning desire. Impressive writing and soul baring that always leaves your indelible mark

Posted 5 Years Ago


beautiful poem and well done sonnet :)


Posted 5 Years Ago


The line "catch this rapid pitch of flawless falling" with the influence of auburn coloring makes me think of the song Roxanne. Its fiery,passionate. Truly enjoyed

Posted 6 Years Ago


Wow. This was captivating. So evocative and provocative, both. And it's so alien from what I usually write and read, that I can't help but be intrigued. I'd like to one day write something half that good. And it's interesting - the rhyming was so subtle, so entwined in the rhythm and mood, that I didn't even notice it until I read one of the comments which mentioned it. Superb! A great introduction to you. Will be reading more shortly.

Posted 6 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Christie Moses
Christie Moses

middle of nowhere, KY



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