It's Raining, It's Pouring

The thunder is your Shadow's cries, the rain is its tears. For you never look behind you to say hello.

It's raining, it's pouring,

your Shadow is coming.

He haunts your dreams,

day and night.

He is there when you are sleeping,

he is there in your waking hours.

The thunder is your Shadow's cries;

the rain is its tears.

For you never looked behind you

to say hello.

Now

All, but the rain, is silenced.

Author's Note

(EDIT 1/29/14) I kinda like it better this way.

Typed directly into the text. Inspired by the song and the fact that there's a thunderstorm happening as I'm typing this. And the image gives me the creeps.

Constructive criticism welcomed! :D

Reviews

[lee von cleef]

All but the rain is silenced, best line,it sets my imagination loose,a descriptively dangerous thing." Release the Krcken!"

[lee von cleef]

maybe I should not be reading a poem about rain sitting out on this sticky,bug buzzing deck,he traps you in a corner or is it the rain? Or is it just a micro-burst like in my poem Soul? Reading this makes me feel selfish ,I just want to share my own emotions .What can you gain as a writer ? I like the shortness, I would like it have a edge of "raw",descriptor "salt",Anvil ,thumb, pulsing sick to your belly fear.I will grant you lose the shortness when you add the description,Some one else can buy "Great Value" I want to know the tick - tock, lump in your throat,tears stopping you cold as the tree fell across your road thoughts that made you feel creepy.

[Kris]

I'm not sure if I read your comment right. This poem was suppose to be about paranoia. For me, I get more freaked out over something that has little explanation, smaller but noticeable details more than all-out fear. You know, less is more. For other people, the level of fear is different. However, these are my thoughts and your comment expresses your thoughts, and that's perfectly fine.

[lalala]

@leevoncleef, huh? o.0

[lee von cleef]

darnell.horse@gmail, huh ?

[lalala]

wht r yu tlkin bout.?

[lee von cleef]

I think we are both lost. some one needs to ask for directions.

[lalala]

lol

[Dr. Wood ?]

scary or what...Got me looking over my shoulder

[allie_arrowz]

peter pan!!!!!
great poem.

[Xerclipse]

Lol the image gives me the creeps too. Nice poem. Its okay, i didnt need the sleep anyway ;)